When was the last time
I saw you smile
when I entered the room;
please tell me.
When was the last time
you looked deep within my eyes
and thought to yourself;
' this is the man
who bridged the link
between my lost esteem
and acceptance "
When was the last time
you needed me
for any reason,
other than to be a silent echo
for your own breach of faith
in me...
you...
When was the last time
you offered me a single thread
of assurance,
certainty,
We have lost all affinity
for one another,
my heart has slipped
into oblivion,
my soul
to abolishment.
When was the last time
you touched me
or felt a desire
to do so ?
When was the last time
you said " I love you "
and meant it...
when ?...
A contest entry
- Surrender or Die by guardianhost.
550 points, ended September 26, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - From the Bottom Of the Bin by HereComesTheSun.
700 points, ended October 10, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I hope the one this was written for has seen it...and soothed the heart that penned it.
Well written, a sad lament.
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Leads us to seek
These are dreaded questions to ask, but important enough to face the dread of asking them. This poem speaks to all by merely asking the questions, leading us to seek the answers ourselves. There is courage in expressing such vulnerability. Congratulations on the trophy.
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Thank you kindly..so nice of you
John
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i loved the truthful feel of this
how i felt as if you were talking to me
thanks for entering
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A day or so ago, for some of it.
Well written piece from the pain.
Love & Blessings,
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~ Janet ~ ~
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When ... was the last time? So true...
So true often times a relationship can appear to die and we are only left to wonder why? -
There is such sorrow pouring through these lines, Poet. I'm sorry you wrote it so well. No one should ever have to wonder such things. It's a good piece, from a sad point of view. My condolences. 
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Thank you so much
John
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stunning
Oh my...tears hold to iris, heart bumps into r ventrigal, gut rounds
the track no where to go back...
does this speak to the blackness of emptiness? does this touch the blood of
lost accountability? does this ever stop aching?
in the 4th stanza after "certainty," do you mean to have the comma?
please do keep your ink flowing. you pull back the skin, probe the epidermal
without the anethetisement of an epidural.
and the fragility of the gossamer wings of the background you chose supports the
delicate nature of our false pride.
so blessed to have tasted your ink's soul.
thank you.
wishing you the best
till next time
stay
liquid
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Thank you so much
John
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such a heartfelt deep write
I could feel the emotions in this piece and how deep it goes also your intelligance in this write is forth comming in brilliance. Artistic style in this is grand along with your choice of words. I love this write as well. Great work my friend. May you have peace and love.
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astounding beauty in this poem...
ink that is taken from the heart-core-spirit
through the soul and out the flesh written into a poem.
You know..it's always...those tender, raw moments
when our true beauty shines the hunger we have in our hearts
to embrace the heights and depths of love...with strength,
courage and honesty...that we are ourselves...humbly
and powerfully
finally....let it out......a fresh breeze of our humanity.
We are not islands unto ourselves.
lovely poem!
ears/Seattle
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I appreciate your comments...You are so nice...always
John
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You have captured the emotions extremely well throughout this poem, so much so they literally jump off the page at the reader. I can feel the sadness in each line, that's talent right there. to be able to draw the reader in and keep them there as if they are going through it. the ending captures the feelings and leaves a sense of loss in the end.
Kat
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This poem is so heartfelt
It echoes with a feeling of profound sorrow, perhaps even a bit of regret. Love, for all its much celebrated joy can be painful. This poem shows us that point of view. Excellent mood set in your words. Just one small error to fix: other than to be an [a] silent echo.
Favourite line:
We have lost all affinity
for one another,
my heart has slipped
into oblivion
What a powerhouse line that one is. Rose.
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perfect title! " When was the last time
you said " I love you "
and meant it...
when ?..." this summarizes the whole poem. feeling the sadness.
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Wow
so deep and heart felt. I enjoy reading it
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Wow John, this is an amazing piece of poetry and there is so much truth in these lines. I sometimes feel this way in my own personal life and you know it is hard to learn how to break these cycles and or at the very least have a heart to heart with that person.
I commend you for such a great poem.
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Such a sad, sad poem. Sorrow just fills the air when this is read.
I read this three times, not even sure why. It was like a magnet
drawing me back to the top each time I got to the bottom.
Excellent write. Nothing needs changing, it is perfect just the way it is.
Very emotionally charged write. I hope this is not bio...
I think I am all caught up now on your writes, was a long list of them there when I got online this morning, you certainly were busy this weekend. That's nice to see.
I hope that continues as I enjoy reading your writes.
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Thank you very much for your comments
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aww this is so sad....i know the feeling well. Like two strangers under the same roof. very well written. i love your work.
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Thank you for your words.They mean a lot to me
John
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Sadness overwhelms with this. It's written so well though and that overcomes much of the sad emotions. Having been very fortunate in love, I can't say that I've been through this, but I can feel the pain and loss in your words.
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Thank you for your comments..So kind of you
John
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i like this it reminds me of my past relationship
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Thank you
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