We float away in ecstasy,
you lying by my side
Gently cresting ripples flow,
where love and lust collide
To feel the sunshine from your heart,
a warm and subtle glow
Fulfilling my every hope and dream,
with the affection you bestow
Kiss away the passing time,
and whisper nothings in your ear
The solemn truth of how I feel,
a love that grows more every year
Wake the mornings next to you,
emotions surging like the waves
But only you at best or worst,
is what this man does crave
Author notes
picture credit
http://75.125.201.25/wp-content/uploads/2008/06/float1_.jpg
A contest entry
- Floating Bed by Riftkin.
650 points, ended August 10, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Gently cresting ripples flow,
where love and lust collide
Beautiful. One more.
Kiss away the passing time,
and whisper nothings in your ear
This was a fantastic poem.
Congrats,
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This is GOLD!!! One of my favorites from you kind sir.
With perfect rhyme and flow, Romantic and all the way through enjoyable.
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fine work here indeed a really beautiful write
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Congrats! I enjoyed reading this, very very nice.
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Congrats on being a winner for the group I am in "You Have Been Acknowledged". This is a very beautiful piece of poetry here. I enjoyed the read!!! -
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Again thank you all, now you have me blushing. All your comments have been wonderful. The poem was written for a special contest held by a special lady. Written with her in mind so it makes everything you have done seem more than just special. Thanks, Rick
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SWEET AND TENDER WORDS!!!!!
This I believe is the very thing all of us want to find, whether it be a woman or a man.
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oops the poinst didnt stick ..Hugs♥
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winner for the week of 8/11Congrats to you from us allYou Have Been Acknowledgedawesome Hun you have done a good jobHugs Angel♥ -
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As I told Tory I am humbled thank you so much I do love romantic poetry as it allows me to reference my true feelings. You know what they say once a romantic always... Again thank you
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Congratulations. This was a lovely piece you penned.
Good luck in all you Endeavor
Passionspromise
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Thank you, from the bottom of my heart. This means so much to me coming from you. As you know I respect you so much as a writer and a friend. Tory you are one of a kind and will always have a huge piece of my heart and I hope the future brings you everything you are searching for, you do deserve it. All of you have humbled me with your comments, but especially you. I do so hope we can continue to talk and be friends. Always in my heart, Rick
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Thats up to you.
You know where I am
always
Tory
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Congrats on winning our "You Have Been Acknowledged" in our group. It means your poem is awesome and needs to be acknowledged by many. You did a wonderful poem and I enjoyed reading it. God bless you.
Sam I Am
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Thank you Sam, Our first meeting though I have heard much about you. My sincere thanks to you for your kind words. I am speechless. Forever in your debt, Rick
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This is so filled with deep emotions and full of love. Its sad but so very well expressed. The flow is wonderful. The metaphors and imagery is just great. Congrats on winning the nomination to being acknowledged this week by our group. Keep on writing.
Nicole
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Thank you, I am honored. I am a hopeless-full romantic thank you, Rick
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You have been acknowledged!!
Congrats on winning the you have been acknowledged and the bronze.
A very enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing
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It all started with you and I thank you. We all wish to be recognised and I am humbled. Thank you from my heart, Rick
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excellent
Beautiful
Flows so smooth and easy....
Congrats on the Bronze Trophy so well deserved
Do come read my new one
Hugs
Susan~~~
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I enjoyed the rhyme and flow of this poem. The tenderness can be felt wrapped around someone this could have been written for. Best of luck to you with this.
Riftkin
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This makes me think of my husband. I love it all but the last line. Using 'does crave' instead of 'craves' doesn't work for me. If you want to maintain the beat of the poem, I'd find a one-syllable adjective for 'man.'
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