While in the mirror, tonight , I saw
someone else who looks within
the forgiveness, by God, with awe
and without condition, all the sin.
Long as I chose my Saviour’s cross
and surrender the unmeasured all,
I join His heart for all my loss
to follow His most beckoning call.
I could hold back, but oh-
His face!
and through His eyes, all my disgrace,
but, in me , He sees His Son’s full share,
and not the nails
which pierced Him there!
Author notes
Written March 31st, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Convert Me by Nicole Hanna.
400 points, ended October 20, 2004, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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An enjoyable write...
An enjoyable write; loved how you wrapped up this poem in the last stanza; nicely done. Perhaps you would like my poem "Silent Tears". --Joe -
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mmmmmmmmm so many questions but this was so very good...thanks for sharing it with us
Kari -
Awesome!
This poem is as timeless and reverently written as any I have come across. Your style and talent amaze me ever I read your work!
Sad the day that I read no more... then shall I be deprived this printed pleasure.
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well said when we hold back we suffer but are forgiven when we give all god gives all god bless keeep up the good work mary
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Dear Cookie,
This is a nice tribute to Him and his forgiveness.
"Who is as merciful as you Oh Lord, among all the Gods that are worshipped"?
Not many I'd bet!
Very pretty, Cookie!
John-Las Vegas -
Hey, thanks for pointing out the meter here... it read much easier the second time around when I realized how to stress words properly. lol. It's still a wonderful write no matter how you look at it!
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Cookie, this is such a wonderful piece filled beyond its depth with pure wisdom. It flows so beautifully, just as our Father's Word does, and rhymes perfectly. I can see, without doubt, that Anasuya is going to have a very difficult time judging this contest; for her contestants all share a common goal in this one!
Good luck; albeit, I don't think you need it!
Love and hugs, BonnieQ
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Yay way to go what a wonderful write. I hope this works for her. GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST. GOD BLESS YOU AND TAKE CARE LAURA
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Thank you. This beingonce published, I catch the syllable needed in the first and last stanza. (As I, too, and a fetish for the meter...thanks for catching it so I can edit!) Otherwise, the scheme is 8-9-8-9
The illustration of nailing sins to the cross gave me goose bumps....shiver. That's a beautiful and sobering analogy of what really happens. That is what's most important. CookieZeal -
This was truly beautiful. The meter was off a bit, and I said I'd look for that in a rhyming poem, lol, but otherwise, the message was lovely. And I'm really digging that title... it has such a nice ring to it, and reminds me of this church retreat I went on with a friend when I was 15 years old, and we all walked this long path, and at the end of the path was a large wooden cross. The group leaders had us write down our sins on paper and we nailed it to the cross. It was really very moving. Thank you for sharing this.
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Your words and flow are just beautiful and perfect,I pray to God that with so many of us,we will get through to her.I love people who will stand up for what they beleive in.I beleive you are truely heaven sent.Keep it up and God bless. Love Brandi
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this is piece touches a deep place. wonderful
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God bless you CookieZeal. This poem is really good. Sin is so ugly but God forgives. He's just so awesome. He looks through all our sin and sees the Blood of Jesus that so amply covers us!!! Lately I've looked in the mirror and well, I've not liked at all what I've seen. I think it's time for me to take another trip to the Cross and rededicate my life to Him, the creator of life and the giver of forgiveness. Thanks for this poem so much. God bless you. ~Melissa
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Why, thank you !! And yes. God doesn't let us get away from His path. There are many criss-crossing and I have enjoyed the neat folks who know the Lord of All. Wowee..hehehee.
Thank you for responding re: search engine. Glad you're here!
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So pretty and so true!
Oh!Wow!I love this!I seem to be seeing other Christians on here,besides myself!Good thing!In answer to your question,I got to this site by search engine! -
Wonderful testimony to our Savior....He
is an awesome God.
Jesus has made it possible for us to have etenal life.
Praise the Lord and bless you.
Sam
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This REALLY looks familiar. Have I read this one before?
Anyway, very beautiful write. I really like the way you shared you feeling to the lord! -
Greetings,
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This is a beautiful piece. It is a very nice surprise to see so many on this site that are believers in Christ and who are not afraid to admit it and even share it. I go to a Christian college so I am no stranger to believers it is just nice to see outside of what we call "the bubble".
"Long as I chose my Saviour’s cross
and surrender the unmeasured all,
I join His heart for all my loss
to follow His most beckoning call. "
I like this part the best because it reminded me of our chapel service today. We sang the hymn "When I Survey the Wonderous Cross".
Beautiful write!!
~Lise
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The poem you placed on the commentary from my Poem, "In The Cross" was ssssssssoooo
o good. I can tell you know Him!!!!! Bless you for that and thank you.
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I love the last four lines! Very cool. Your emotions come through well.
God bless
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Although I do not share your religious views, the rhythm of this peice was just breathtaking
. I could really feel your love for your god and others. Very true emotion here. Fantastic. -
Very interesting,
Ilike your opening stanza the most;
While in the mirror, tonight , I saw
someone else who looks within
the forgiveness,by God, with awe
and without condition, all the sin.
I also write poems of faith, some direct, some indirect. One imparticularyou may be interested in, its titled, "Forgive Them"
To Calvary Hill, he drags his cross
With jeers, they urge him on,
Shouting, cursing, insane with hate;
Even though he did nothing wrong.
Never a word of compassion,
No love for the one in pain,
Just a sneering mocking senseless mob
Crying, “Crucify him! Crucify him!”
Over and over again.
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Cookie you brought tears to my eyes with your strong faith!!!!! Touching and so beautiful sis!!!
~Laura
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aye, He will always see the good, even when we canna. look deeper love, and e'll see what He deems so worth the time. all roads lead to ome i suppose, and He wants ye there, even if ye take the long way, or a few detoures along th way. thank ye for this,
arden -
great work! God is so wonderful! thank you for sharing this!
Bradley -
Oh Cookie don't know how I missed this one....But a very moving piece.......
.. beautifuly written of course shows the mercy and love ....Yes he loves you...ya the Cookie Zeal so precious love you sweetie..... think ill promote this one Love, †Sherry†
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the grace of mercy he bestows on our worldly ways
~cheers~
this is right on the mark of the nail and cross
why he had to die for our sins
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Jesus knows
Great witness to our Lord and Savior Dianne. Couldn't find your suggested piece "If Because; When and Then" however.
I'm very glad to meet you and thank you for your comment on "a prayer". It gives my heart a boost each time I find another believer who is not afraid to reveal it to this wicked world. jean -
PS. Sorry if I sound school-ma'm in that comment ... I've just been grading my classes books so I'm not back in colloquial mode yet! LOL!
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Truthful and pure/simple.
Hi there! What a cleverly constructed and well planned poem. This is meant in a GOOD way ie that the careful way it has been put together really enhances the impression of your personal faith and devotion. The way you've laid it out expresses a kind of calm. Great - sometimes poems on personal beliefs get inward-looking and isolate the reader if they don't believ the same, but with this one you express the simplicity and purity of your ideals in a clear and graceful way. -
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Unto the poor who have no peace,
A kingdom that shall never cease.
Past villages where witchs burned,
Cities where great thinkers learned.
Shanties set in streets of mud,
Rivers that ran red with blood.
Out to the place where the wild waves foam,
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sweet sentiment, zeal.
a living representation of christ's embodiment...
striving to be what/who God intended.
i liked the pacing...
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Thank you all sweeties for commenting. I've been away a few days,and it's such a pleasant surprise!!! CookieZeal
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Beautiful and inspiring write!!!
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Gave me chills it was so TRUE and right on.
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whoa.
i am by no means religious, i dont even have faith in any higher being, so usually i cant read poems that deal with really spiritual issues, because i can't really relate at all, but i loved this. -
Wonderfully penned! You seem to have a flair for writing on a number of topics. I really enjoyed reading this. How can I put this....some people write religious pieces and as I read them I sort of squirm in my seat. This didn't make me squirm. Does that make sense? Does to me. :) Excellent.
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OH MY, This is so moving, and so powerful, I absolutely love this....
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