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Tethered

Tethered to myself, I am,
In an undefined labyrinth.

My conscience is stained;
This spirit echoes with my silent screams.
I lie wounded.
Tears act like acids,
Incinerate my wishes.

I stretch my arms,
This vagueness blinds me,
I thirst for a touch,
A silhouette, a word;
I am thirsty.

Too jaded to fight, I am,
My soul’s heavy,
A weight pulls me down.

Procrastination engulfs me into its shadow;
Bitterness consumes me.

My unanswered desires mute me,
Snakes of dilemmas swathe my being
And strangle me,
Contort my world.

There’s no savior,
And I gaze in vain
At the borders, beyond which
Redemption rests.

Author notes

I just wrote about what I am feeling these days..Its about how we limit ourselves and get caught in our own thoughts and confusions.

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  • rbruce gold member
    November 15
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    I think this is an excellent piece of writing showing emotions and confused thoughts. A common thing in our ever changing world. thank you for sharing this with us all.


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    November 15
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    Wonderful imagery. You have packed this piece with some serious emotion. Fantastic piece, thank you so much for sharing it and for entering my contest.


  • sakkthi
    November 13
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    My conscience is stained;
    This spirit echoes with my silent screams.
    I lie wounded.
    Tears act like acids,
    Incinerate my wishes.

    quite impressive lines.

    what a final touch here.

    ''There’s no savior,
    And I gaze in vain
    At the borders, beyond which
    Redemption rests.


  • savemysoul
    November 11
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    nice job with this piece, it coulda been stronger, but overall it was good. thanks for entering and good luck.

    -- jordan


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 9

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    This was really good and very well written. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in the contest. Keep up the good work!


  • Kathraina silver member
    October 5

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    Powerful and raw emotions jump off the page here. Very good job with this write, the imagery is vivid and your words flow quite well!

    bravo and thank you for entering



    ♥ kate


  • awannabepoet
    September 12

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    Thank you so very much for sharing this and entering the contest.


    best of luck to you.


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    September 10

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    This is an awesome write. I like the way you just let your feelings flow onto the page. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Karra-Mayy
    September 4
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    i enjoyed this write emensly

    well done xxx


  • skilter
    August 30
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    beautiful write, very vivid and descriptive! thank you for entering!


  • Little Lesley
    August 28
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    Great. I loved it. It's a great poem. Brilliant.
    Good luck!
    ♥~Little Lesley~♥


  • Ami
    August 27

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    Wow I really liked this the imaginary in this = Awesome
    Congrats on the Honorable mention that you have won for this so far :]
    Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck
    -♥Amy♥


    • Parth Sawhney
      August 28
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      hey amy..

      thanx a lot for ur kind comment..i m glad u liked my work..

      take care..
      ~Parth..


  • Anshu
    August 24

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    Honest

    hey Bro....

    I must congratulate that its a lovely creation from your side. The words that you have crafted made me to imagine the state that you might be going through. But at the same time it infuses a fear in me if everything is allright at your end. Your words are gloomy, your thoughts lil scattered, I am more of happy and sad after reading this piece. I just wish that if you are storming with something in your life, them may you win asap!

    By the by, its great to see you back on AP with such a honest and beautiful poem. I think your creation will give a kick to my thoughts and I will make a comeback to AP damn soon...! hehe

    All the love to you my bro and oyeah will be waiting to read more from your end!

    Love
    Anshu

    • Parth Sawhney
      August 24
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      hey didi..
      thanks so much for ur amazing comment..u know i always like to know your opinion and views about my work..i have written this piece after a gap of two years..a major writin block..hehe..i m so glad that u liked my work..
      yeah..i'm too waitin for ur comeback and more talented writes from ur side..
      will keep u updated wid my work..

      take care..
      ur li'l bro..
      -Parth

  • Sweet Angel16
    August 22
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    wow!...now that is brilliant!


  • Arjita gupta
    August 17
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    the words are very expressive and the dark emotions lash out in a lucid way...nice write!


  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    August 15
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    Nicely written with very strong emotions. =] Excellent piece, keep up the good work! ^_^


  • Princess-nee
    August 15
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    Hey ,quite a different poem.I like it


  • Candyknife gold member
    August 15

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    hmm

    i really like this piece and someones comes to mind when i read it so i may be a little biased though it has nice structure and the wonrding is amazing very well written i have to admit


  • starving4perfection
    August 13
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    great job you did here! i enjoyed reading it
    thanks for the entry and good luck!


  • DanO
    August 13
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    Nice


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 10
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    this was verry good, lots of emotion in there, that i enjoyed, take care


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 9

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    well done write, expressing your feelings, which i suspect we readers share at times as well. i do like your sixth stanza - my unanswered desires mute me....

    good poem and good luck in the contest.

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