My heart is darkness, my life is woe, my soul is Gothic.
For the sorrow of my heart will blend with the shadows,
But shan't be broken,
Thou lord shall never be able to destroy my soul,
Shall it be immortal,
The black cloud may cover thou day,
But never mine,
For I fail to exist,
But thou lord have killed many,
For which shall never been forgiven, or forgotten..
For my heart is darkness, my life is woe, and my soul is gothic,
Thou lord, will never show real compassion.
Thou fail to have compassion,
As thou shall let thou son die for no reason,
Thou lord are no parent,
As you sat and watched thou's sons last breath.
Thy let horrors rule the world of which thy created,
For which thou shall be keeper of love and unhappiness,
For this job thy fail to complete.
As for that,
I shan't ever believe thou Lord exist,
And will no longer be putting my heart in thou hands.
Author notes
this is just a free style poem.
this isnt really a poem, its just me getting emotion out and in the mood im in, this is the only way i could put it in.
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i like i feel this way
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nice poem kadie
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stay happy
A very emotive poem. It really touched my heart but as i always believe that what ever our life is , is because of us. okay and we should trust god because he has given alot of things to us. so see the bright sight girl. stay happy.
Lucky.
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nice poemmm
love yoooou
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The heart written speaks higher than the mind written. Use of wordage is alil unbalanced, but you flow well. Nice creativity, wrote your anger and sorrow well. A struggle many have. Can write the hardship, but to put it into power is being creative. Again nice write.
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this is a really good poem. u seem to to be matured beyond ur years i like it.
~destiny
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Wow, you are 15.. you sure lol? Good penning girl... great peice here. Good luck in life and all your adventures.
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Great! :)
That was very good. Very well-written, and loving the Shakespearen-style language. Great job!
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I loved every line..esp the title..
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This is poem is quite unusual compared to your other ones. I liked it, very imagnative and full of pain indeed. I hope you're okay though, this poem was very strong and the flow was alright. I would just change some of your i's to I's.You're getting better and better at poetry with each poem you write! Great work.
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I quite like the piece it's nice and well written free write. I think all the first letters of each line should be capitalized firstly. The old school English usage of "thou" is very nice. Although in the following lines I think if you wrote thy instead of thou it would make it nice.
'thou let horrors rule the world of which thou created' - The second thou shld switch to thy.
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