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Fairytale's Dance (Colab)


At times I feel like giving up on life
for its wounds are so hard to mend.


I see you’re neither here nor there but in the midst.
Your contemplation I can't comprehend.


Everything built is easily destroyed
thus nothing remains worthy for us to stay.


To break then build is a lesson in life
so face your fears, don’t run away.


But fears can be haunting & daunting.
Certainly mine have obsessed me

Fear only takes over when you believe it so.
Beauty is there if you could only see.


How could beauty be seen in life
when it's only ever lies and deception?


Life can be beautiful if you chose it so,
so take my hand, rifle this perception.

What if you let go, will I not flow
through the tides of despair alone?


Life dances when one takes chances.
Two will tango in this great unknown.


But life's melody can be out of tune.
What if we trip and fall?


Come what may, tomorrow’s a new day.
Keep hope at heart, stand proud and tall.


But the tall crumble into smaller pieces
& the proud stand behind thicker fences.


Take a chance, this door long awaits
behind it you'll find no false pretences.


To open doors is to call forth the wind
& I might be swept into seamless storms.


The howling wind can be soft or fierce
so I understand you would rather be warm.


To me 'warmth' is just a fairytale word
non-existence in my world's dictionary.


New words can be learnt, even understood.
Its in our nature to be wary.


And wary we have been, what was the gain?
Broken hearts and silenced tongues.


There is always sunshine after the rain.
Broken hearts will mend to life's sweet song.


So shall we sing, shall we dance?
& if we fall we can always retrace...
                                                            so retrace...


I now hold out my hand to lead the way.
where dreams are made, our special place.

Here's my hand, let's dance the floor,
giving life to all our sleeping dreams.


To the song of life, we'll sway in sync.
Where the light of love will always gleam.

 

                                Together
                                                 Forever








(C)Noor & Ken 8/9/2009

Author notes

Contest prompt: Colab.
This collab was done between me and Ken-Maverick. Thanks Ken for the fun time and the great write, you're truely a talented poet, it was so much fun writing with you.
Obviously I wrote the purple verses and he wrote the blue verses.

I was never prouder of a piece more than I am of this one.

Thanks for reading!

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 8

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    Ah...Dance partners, on the dance floor of life..hand in hand to face life without fear! Such a wonderful collaboration, penned beautifully! Mom


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    August 18

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    This is my fav. of yours so far
    wow! great poetic advise
    smart man this Ken
    this is very true Noor
    as far as I can tell this is what truth is
    life is what you make of it!
    there is bad there is good but we have the choice of reacting or accepting, when we accept we transform our life's, but you have to be diligent and never give up,
    I am so book marking this and you can rhyme too
    so much talent
    excellent write
    God bless you my friend...
    s for both of you!


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    August 11

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    the words you have penned touch my heart
    to take my hand and lets dance the word of life
    together hand in hand forever .. beautiful the words
    written about life and the flow of living stunning
    hugs Angel♥


  • mcope8050
    August 10

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    VERY INTRIGUING

    after now reading through this for the 3rd time,,, it's as though we are listening in on a VERY interesting couple having this DEEP conversation,,,,the type of conversations i often long for,,, something with depth and insight,,,, thanks again for sharing this

  • mcope8050
    August 10
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    WOW

    That was a joy to read,,, the play between eachothers words was FANTASTIC,,, almost hope vs despair,,, the the progression throughout the write became more intriguing as I read,,, this is GREAT,,,, thanks to both of you for this one,,,,

  • Love it! (:


  • Puppydog gold member
    August 8

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    THIS IS TRULY LOVELY!!!

    Both of your words are filled with hope, hope for a new beginning which may be fearful but must be faced. 's


  • eat.yo.soup
    August 8
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    oh^^

    I love this interaction. And its so pleasing to read, beautifully written!

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