An opportunity forsaken,
A potential reality missed,
My mentality was mistaken,
As my errs of past and future kissed.
Situations revisited,
In my apologetic mind,
For I’ve lost a good friend before,
I’ll not make a mistake in kind.
Author notes
Despite it being a while since I've been on here, I have still been writing... and since I wrote this, my friend and I have become close again! So big 
's all round!
What did you think?
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very well written!!!
As my errs of past and future kissed.
this takes a lot of thought, but thats a good thing as an author!
keep writing
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I think you need to use "errors", as "err" is a verb, and I believe you are trying to use a noun. Also, you make want to consider not trying to make it rhyme. Specifically the second stanza feels a bit forced, and it takes away from the overall meter and impact. Aside from that, I really thought it was a lovely little piece that conveyed it's message quite well. Nice job!
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your errs of past. I wonder what that means. I miss both chess and playing cards in the cabin.
Bigs all around indeed. Never nice when a potato hits you on the what.
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lol that's the reason I conveyed it ambiguously, I'd rather not be direct as it's a sensitive subject and close to my heart... But I definately miss chess in the common room, and trying on masks in the cabin.
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Those photos are still on my other phone, I think! Screen is cracked though =[
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Well that's poo then isn't it!
Was very random seeing you in Saundersfoot arcade today, especially with a strawberry icecream... everybody knows that chocolate is better... right... -
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'chocolate is better than strawberry'.
Dear lord, I hope you're a liar.
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