Take my hand and dance with me
Will you partner destiny?
As we glide across the floor
You will feel safe and secure.
Hear the violin explain
How to leave behind desdain
As we hear a symphony
We will count from one to three.
1, We sing in one true voice
Be aware, you have a choice
As the map of life is shown
You will find you're not alone.
2, There are two paths to take
On the left, one big mistake
To the right, the certain road
Come, I'll help you, share the load,
3, The steps it takes to find
True contentment, peace of mind
One two three, around we go
Move together quick quick, slow.
Take my hand and dance with me
All it takes to become free
I will take you far and wide
Destiny, your spirit guide.
A contest entry
- BWOW~~~Best Write of the Week #16 with aboomer, Starz of Heaven and islekine by islekine.
700 points, ended August 15, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lovely feel to this. Soft, airy with a nice rhyme.
I enjoyed this. nicely done!
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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I love to dance!
And I love your style! Thanks so much for sharing your talent again! Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on!
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Very effective
I feel like I have actually been dancing with you!
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Frothy rhymes - requires sympathetic belief system to appreciate - not to my taste. I am glad that you can see the certain road and can show mortals the way to freedom. Safety is something (for me)to flee (like crazy) from and truth is just a personal perception that hopefully is re-mapped on a regular basis. Its good that people help each other but in the end we determine and carry our load alone.
I wish you well on your path and send best wishes to your muse.
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Superb
'tis a very fine write, indeed. You have expressed yourself quite well. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
i like this a lot, that whole feeling of being guided, i liked how you turned that into a dance, this was a pleassure to read, take care and best of luck in the contest
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nice poem. in particular, i like yours second stanza - good sentiment. interesting format taking the waltz count.
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I love this write. Trust our guides to lead us in the most beautiful dance.
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