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BloodShot petals

Pinched to perfection
her satin skin will swell
all will rise to greet the surface of her skin
a blushing colour from under pale sheets of nothing
will seep like poison into the fabric
leaving her bloodshot in the sun
for all to see.

Author notes

lol back to my old way of writing.

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  • AsheAngel
    October 13
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    I like it but that's me short sweet and to the point


  • Delete---
    September 7

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    Wow this is so beautiful; I Love how each line transmits into the other.. you are a good writer if this is your old style im sure both new and old styles are very good.
    I'll check out more of your stuff (:
    thanks for the read.
    Kitty
    x


  • Angelflower
    August 16
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    Well good lord! back to your old way of writing hmm? yet it's still beautiful, and short wonderful write hun..

    Angel


  • The Twisted Rose
    August 8
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    I liked it, Can make you think, and also visualise

    Much love
    Nicky


  • Shadow Anonymised gold member
    August 8

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    pale sheets of nothing? darling i'm stealing that.

    such a beautiful piece, short, yes, but so well written.

    but i am stealing a few lines. sorry.

    thine.

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