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Nothing goes as planned

These thoughts that violate
I cannot seem to annihilate

They take over my dreams
And hallucinations impede

Like a world that is forged
Like a stomach that purged

What I have left cannot be real
As I make myself a deal

I look myself in the eyes
And say even more lies

Things will be better tomorrow
But the next day with great sorrow

I am back where I started
And I never seemed to have departed

For it seems that the next day
Was just like a replay

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  • BitterDreamer
    August 8
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    i like the theme of this. you're right, nothing goes as planned.
    good flow-i like the up and down of it. great job.