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play crack the sky.




Steel-laced shadows
fling themselves towards the east.

I know God today,
in the fragile silence and the
dark spaces of your hands.

The pavement's cold yet we
step out fearlessly;
daring ruin from each crack.
 
We're breathing the life of this city,
and our fingers are scraping the sky.









Author notes

haven't written anything for yonks, so i apologise in advance for possible lack of quality.

option #2. inspired by: play crack the sky - brand new.
here's the lyrics link http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/brandnew/playcrackthesky.html
but i do suggest youtube-ing the song, or going the whole mile and buying the entire deja entendu album. it will change your life. [:

my muse has also been dead for a while now,
but something strange and possibly amazing happened the other day, and it has rekindled my zest for life. i was listening to the song the title is from at the time. [:

the pavement cracks are a reference to my usual avoidance of them. i never really thought they would result in bad luck, but still subconsciously refused to step on them anyway. i step on them on purpose sometimes now...



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  • Not-The-Sun
    August 26

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    i agree with a previous comment, you don't waste a single word here. The last two lines are outstanding, they emphasize the title well.
    I hope you enter (or have already entered) my Brand New titles prompt contest I would love to read more of your work.
    Congrats on a well deserved gold!


    • sora.
      August 27
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      haha i have been thinking of entering, i hope i can come up with something. >_<


  • zhaniswolf
    August 11

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    lol I do that too (in reference to the cracks on the sidewalk)

    I thought it was good. Don't be so hard on yourself lol (not that I have room to talk)

    Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • ghostofligeia
    August 8

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    I fucking LOVE that song, one of my absolute favorites by anyone, ever. It's so simple and kind of repetitive, but so powerful.

    This poem is definitely good. I love your style in general, how you kind of abstract verbs and adjectives to apply them to things that are very nontraditional to pair them with, where the literal meaning becomes pretty vague but through connotation the piece is still very powerful. I've seen people write similarly to this, but never quite the same...your poems are so succinct and very moving despite that brevity...it's like you never waste a single word, like it is all very meticulously crafted to an extent that it probably actually isn't...it's kind of hard to describe, but it's pretty amazing. =)


    • sora.
      August 8
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      i must firstly point out the fact that you have wonderful taste in music.

      i do apologise for always being so vague...it is mainly so that certain people will pick up on things and know what i'm on about, yet others will have no idea it has anything to do with an event that they might have even witnessed alongside me. it's for my own safety, really. >_>

      but thank you for the kind words once again, you are far too nice to me.

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