Here's a thing
Two men met
And fell in love
And they lived together
Both as men (not one butch, one fem)
For many years
And their friends were lawyers,
teachers, musicians
And any other professions
You could care to mention
And they didn't go insane
Or beat each other up
Or catch AIDS and die
They weren't any nicer to their mothers
Than anyone else
Nor did they have a keen eye
For interior design
They were just two men
Two men in love
Leading a fairly ordinary life
And all they asked for
Was the same visiting rights
The same inheritance rights
The same next of kin rights
The same human rights
"Teacher, which is the greatest commandment?"
"Find out which men are diddling other men
and persecute them."
Author notes
"I suggest the defying of our marriage laws by gays and lesbians...is an attempted gang rape of our culture. It is an attempt to sodomize our society. Moreover, America demonstartes all the symptoms and needs of a victim of sexual assault." - Rev. Mark H. Creech & Cotton Candy Rose
Written March 29th, 2004
A contest entry
- GLBT Pride by Boe.
600 points, ended September 7, 2004, 7 entries
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Comments
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Wow, this piece really hits me. This reminds me so much of my best friend. He's gay and he wants to marry his boyfriend, but because of the gay marrage law he can't. I love this piece. Thanks for entering. Keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest!!!! Take care!
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interesting! deeply explained, and i like your flow.
Great job!
-Sancia-
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Hey Del, this was a great write.... touched me pretty deeply, you know, considering I am gay. And your point is oh so true. People rise to the occasion to persecute us so very often... and it's so frustrating to have people hate me and I can't ever understand why. It makes absolutely no sense. Anyways, your poem used a lot of dry wit, and I appreciated that. The quote in your authors comments was really amusing, when coupled with your poem... thank you for writing it.
Dancing in the silver shadows
Arien Silverleaf -
And they didn't have a cat
Or a collection of leather trousers
And (I hope) they didn't listen to Celine Dion
All that often
And yes: as ever ....
A message, but never a sermon
And always a sense of humour.
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Powerful write my friend~
Bravo to you~
Keep on writing and evoking that emotion~
Appreciate YOU~
Big hugs and much love~Desire
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this is a great poem. Humerous at times, and touching and real and quite beautiful despite the political commentary, which is usually toxic. Good write.
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I kind of liked the way that this poem was disconnected and straight forward, not because I usually like that kind of thing, because I don't. I just really like the way that such a stark presentation makes it seem perfectly normal, not artsy or different. It's a plain statement of "this is what it is and all we want to to be ourselves". I really really like this poem. Very powerful. Thank you!
Riv -
Wow.. Del.. straight shootin' here kiddo.. got them right between the eyes.. a powerful piece with such hidden depths.. I love the way you bring out the bigotry people have against gays.. well done !!!
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Hmmmmm, sodomising the system? And this is a bad idea why?
A very powerfull poem senor, very powerful. -
personally, i am disgusted by the gov'ts need to take rights away from regular people simply because they have a different sexual preference. even if gay's and lesbians can't get married, at least allow them to have civil unions; i heard even those are up for question now,....what is wrong w/ our society?
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I highly agree with Renee's comment and this poem. People always tend to label someone as if they knew more about that person than that one person knows oneself. I'm not gay, but I hate the way they're treated now. It's like racism only about sexuality, like something will happen if we don't stop gays from going together or marrying...it ain't like they gonna stop being gay. Great write though, I liked this a lot.
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This poem is very provocative indeed. I live in a society where people turn their noses up at gay people. In some places it is okay for a woman to bed another women however if two men decide to have a relationship then all hell breaks loose. Personally, I belive in a realationship between a man and a woman. I do belive that woman was made for man. I am not homophobic and will not show hatred or disgust towards homosexuals. It is a choice that was made between two consenting adults of the same sex to be together, however, I cannot say that it is right as the teachings of the bible relates otherwise...
Reading your poem, I could actually visualise the characters realating to each other in a friendly way and not physically as my mind will not allow me to go that far..... -
Again, an amazing write, very dry and humourous. I remain amazed at how much prejudice there is in a so-called civilised society. The last few lines ring so true and yet are so full of bitter humour, if I did not know any better, I'd think you were merely cynical. Unfortunately, not. I have recently told a few close friends I am bi and, thankfully, they have supported me. However, a friend of mine who is more publicly open about his sexuality than I am has been bitched about and betrayed by so many people. I remain confused and astounded at how love and lust can be a sin.
But I digress: this is a great piece and the slightly bitter, stark dry tone is wonderful. How nice to have honesty.
Much love,
Ashes
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Where I thought the poem was interesting, the juxtaposition of its message with the quote you've placed in your author's comment proved to be far more thought provoking in my mind. People in this country have become fanatical about the issue of gay marriage, with the biggest argument being that it violates the sanctity of marriage... and yet there are 'traditional' marriages out there that do far worse- adultery and abuses of all kinds. Gay marriage is the least of our problems
Anyways, as for your poem- I thought it well written, but as Gingerandhoney states it feels lacking in any real attention-grabbing intensity. Where I understood and agreed with it, I didn't relate. What I'd suggest is replacing a word here or there for something more descriptive or vivid, not much, but just enough to give the reader something to wrap their imagination around.
keep penning,
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Well worth a read
man that shits great. i loved the line:
"Both as men (not one butch, one fem)"
it made me chuckle and it made me think.
kinda lost the thread towards the end but a nice message and some funny, and touching lines.
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Excellent
It was very powerful, everyone believes in different things. I say do what makes you happy without hurting any body else.
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good write
Well the poem appears to just state plain facts in this, a bit like a newspaper clipping, stark and stattaco. What I dont understand is why quote somoene else in the author's quotes in order to make a statement? You already made the statement in the poem. Also, after reading this piece I was left with a "so what" kinda feeling, not because I dont care about the subject, I care very much about the subject, but because of the lack of feeling conveyed in the poem.
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This is really provocative, it is so ironic how those stereotypes get played over and over again until the masses start to believe them, it is also easy to reject that which is unfamiliar, that which you are afraid of. I agree with you 100% really strong voices are the keys to change
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My daughter, Rachel (age 25) and I have decided that something else is going on in the world that we must not get a glimpse of. Something great that could affect us as humans is happening, and all the attention given to gay marriages and relationships is a mere distraction. Gay men and women have fallen in love and been together since the beginnings of time. Why so much focus now? I think two consenting adults ought to be able to live as they please, without the governmnt in their homes. Who are we to judge? The present government would have probably said (in biblical times) that Jesus was a homosexual because he only hung out with men. This kind of stuff insenses me and makes all Chrictians look guilty of judgements such as these. I am a Christian and I say, let God judge each inidividual according to their measure in life. Homosexuality is no greater sin than any other, I've lusted after many men in my heart and mind and I will have to answer for that when I meet the Creator. If I were a homosexual I would not be concerned with what the damn government thinks. It is not of my choosing as a life style, and so what. I love men, they are appealing to me. That's my preference. I also love women, they are my solace. I am not bi-sexual. This controversy is a deturant to something greater that has nothing to do with human love. It is evil and we had better dig deeper to find out what the hell is really going on. Sorry for the rant on your poem, but this is what it brought from the pit of my soul. I say, if you love someone then be happy with them, and forget Uncle Sam, he's a used up sentiment anyway! And those Christians who spout out obsenities of hatred towards gay people are not followers of Christ at all, they have created a new doctrine, and that is to be judge, jury, accuser, and misleader. Christ said at the last Supper, "You are to love everyone as you love yourself, as you love me..." Where is the love?
Much Love,
Renee
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wow...such a message
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