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Morning Cuppa ~ Chai (Haiku)

noisy Grandpa
enjoying his morning cuppa
slurp slurp...

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  • meena krish
    August 29
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    A nice imagery of grandpa drinking his
    chai, I can hear as well as see it..cute little
    write


  • Sentimentalpoet
    August 26
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    swee....t

    this is cute and short. good work


  • The Eros
    August 26
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    simple and great

    so simply done and gives perfect imagery


  • Harrisham Minhas
    August 25

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    This is cute.

  • a u r a
    August 14

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    music!!!

    Revise what?his slurps slurp?? ROLF -see grandpa enjoys his morning cuppa with his own accompaniment- his music -cool imagery-and yes I liked the humor in it too


  • bengalibelle
    August 8

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    Hi minaji...ki haal hai?
    This slurp, slurp sound brings out the image of a toothless grandpa so well. It reminds me a little of my pa-in-law, lol!
    Well-done!


  • azure85 gold member
    August 7

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    LOL This is cute, and I hope Grandpa does enjoy his morning coffee, he deserves it! Thank you for a delightful haiku.

  • angeldreams
    August 7

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    Hey that's really cute.
    No actually really really cute.
    I loved the expression 'slurp slurp'.
    Early morning, rocking chair, corner of balcony and my dadaji.
    It suddenly brought that image to my mind.

    Nice read.
    Keep in touch.
    -Swati

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