Each night, his roughened hands scrape over her.
They take it hard and heavy, the same as his work.
No time for sweet and sensual, she wants it mean.
Getting it that good helps her workout at the gym.
Three times a week, she hammers away at her body.
Every other day, her ritual of iron forges solid muscle.
The hard woman is molded like the walls of his trade.
She is a lucky bricklayer's wife, and she is built to last.
Author notes
Short and sweet, I wanted to use powerful images that got to the point. Unintentionally, that point was made in two brief stanzas, and I found it finished a little early. Perhaps this will leave room to the reader's imagination.
A contest entry
- Give it to me! Sensual Pic Prompt Contest by PrInCeSsOfRoCk.
950 points, ended August 27, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Damn, this is definately sensual. Makes me wanna be a bricklayers wife.
Good job, even though it did end too soon. We want more!!! XD
Vhoori
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i would agree that it does leave the readers imagination to wander. i liked it a lot. i liked how you ended it "she is built to last"
nice take on the prompt. thanks for your entry.
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My Favorite
This is my favorite entry in this contest so far. You are right that it is short and sweet, but I think it is perfect just as it is.
My favorite line: No time for sweet and sensual, she wants it mean
It's weird because I just made a comment almost exactly like that to a friend of mine the other day--about no sweetness, just liking it mean. lol
I guess that's why this poem caught my attention.
Anyway, good luck in the contest. If we could vote, yours would get mine.
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wow this is awesome!! i really like the creative juices you have flowing
here, really no pun intended,
well done short and so veryyyy sweet
Blessings
Rend
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