"Deception is an art just like poetry
& most poets are masters in deception"~ Hikary Lady
Thin fingers & thick lines
dance sketching overlapping lies.
Encoding the truth into tricky codes
using a bunch of elusive metaphors.
Imagery tip toeing, spreading veils
over burning emotions
& personal deeds.
Indirect confessions of sinful desires,
uncountable numbers of stanzas
holding inner wishes...
of lonely cores.
Deceiving those who read by using
mazes of meanings
& deceptive rhythms.
Using author-notes to declare:
Consider what's between the lines
unpersonal.
Afraid to be pitied:
Thus we write... & we write
parts of our hearts on temporary papers
& when we read... when we read we say:
Oh, that's personal
...again...
(C)Noor 8/7/2009
Author notes
I know many poets might find this irritating but I think it's also truthful because I believe that it doesn't matter what we write about sometimes, as poets, it always hold some part of us in it, some personal part and sometimes some poets use metaphor and imagery to hide the truth that what thay have written has anything to do with their personal life.
I believe that every poet gets personal no matter what he/she is writing about.
You're free to write anything in your comments, I have my heart open.
Thanks for reading!
Any suggestions for improvement?
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This piece I think is very truthful and I also believe what you've written. To me you can really only write about things you've felt. Although I was once told to not believe everything you read as it is a foolish practice and assuming. After all they said "I am a writer and I love love.
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What's beautiful about your poem is that it lifts a veil, but not every poet wears one or maybe not all the time. Your words draw the reader to seek or reflect personally. I find for myself it is natural to compare oneself to other poets, but I have found that when each is ready in time they release metaphor or paint with it the art they are trying to convey. Poetry I have found comes from various levels: mind, heart, and soul. Not everyone is ready to write from the deepest depths or combine all three or even fellow reading poets to open, see, and feel their words from all three.
Poetry beholds limitless possibilities of release, connection, play, or simply being a day in time. Where ever the poet is at I find the honor to come to know what they have shared or leave the poem with lingering possibilities of meaning.
Temporary papers as you have said may only last temporary, but words written and taken in by others last a lifetime or more.
Your write is beautiful, truthful, and well written. Thanks for sharing what is under your veil.
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I loved the quote..but differ with the thoughts and feelings in your poem....
are you saying that ........unless we personally experience a prompt in our lives?
That we have no business writing on it?
goodness.....the libraries all around the worldwould be empty...if this were fact and reality.
in your author notes you state your heart is open?
really?
please read your poem
it might shed some light on how open your heart truly is...
it seems "dim."
respectfully,
ears2hearyou/Seattle
I guess...I didn't get it....we should only write what we have personally
experienced? That metaphor writing is bitter to your tastes.
well..each have our own tastes!
I will respect yours...as you respect...ours?
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Hmm using the tools of deception to describe deception. Interesting.
Is all that we see or seem
But a dream within a dream? (Poe)
I don't see the point of not being personal. The thing I like about this piece is that it provides an oblique insight into new and interesting thoughts. I am interested in how people feel and what goes on in them. Poems like this go back and forth, back and forth, growing brighter until we see ourselves in the glimpses of another's metaphor.
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Love it
I am now truly inspired by you , What you have written as notes is completely true , you are a great writer this poem is magnificent , I wish you well in your writing, you have the same views as me. I believe that all poetry comes from the heart to the tips of your fingers write what you want to write but it definitely does mean something to you if you understand and are a dedicated poet .
Please read and comment my poetry id love to hear your thoughts thanks .
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Lady you are right!!!!
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I rellay love the honest deception that is this piece. It tells so accurately what all poets do but at the same time appears to be hiding another meaning undernieth.
Very well done
kitch xx
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Clever! I suppose some people would find this irritating, but I've been writing poetry for a decade and a half (not that long, but I am still young o.O) and I find it 100 percent honest. I don't know of any poem I've written that didn't have a part of me in it somewhere, and I know more than a few that have "personal" dreams, thoughts, desires, hurts, etc. I believe that most poets instill these things in their poems, but also that many poets don't even realize it. Sometimes I read poems now that I wrote when I was 11 or 12 and go "Whoa...oops...I can't believe I WROTE THAT DOWN," even if it's hidden. *Phew*
That being said :-D--I love the vivid imagery and how you took a chance to be honest on a website full of poets, because that's what poetry is about. Being honest...somewhere in mazes of meanings :-). Kudos to you, I think this is really brilliant!
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This is pretty cool, though if it's that personal I don't envy you.
"Afraid to be pitied" - you heard of positive feedback cycles before?
They lead to dark places, and only Batman can elevate you from dark places.
Unless it is a trap for Batman, as you actually want him to come save you, as you are the deceiver, after all, right? -
I have to agree, poets write about personal stuff. I know for me I have to feel it to write about it. If there are no feelings, no emotions how can you write it with feelings and emotions..But sometimes I just write, not knowing why or where it came from. Good write I ejoyed reading it, thanks for sharing!
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Yes i believe this poem to be very true how can something a poet writes be impersonal to them? No matter what it is, it must have some significance in their lives if they feel the need to write about it.
The structure of the poem lends intself easily to the style and topic of writing. Well done.
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How complex we are, and your poem shows you to be in a thoughtful mood Noor.
Mind games we are playing, one moment hiding behind the mask, the next revealing all(in code so often as you say). A very interesting poem
love david
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nice
a very thoughtful poem that especially lends its value to fellow writers
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wonderful look at the unseen
this is heartfelt and real,,, i love it,,, the prompt is intriguing and keeps running through my head,,, thanks for sharing,,,, your personal stuff,,,, that's personal
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Ah, a most intriguing look at the creative process. I agree with most of what you say. I try to write mostly from personal experience, ie: intellectual; spiritual, emotional or humorous, etc.
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wow, you truly spoke from your soul on that piece and I agree with you 100%
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Wow!!!...I totally agree!!! Just speaking for myself that is. Anytime, you take the time to do anything meaningful, it has your soul in it to some degree or all. Very insiteful!!!!
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SIMPLY WONDERFUL THOUGHTS!!!!
Oh my sis You have said the very reasons I began writing down my thoughts and feelings in the first place! At first I was letting out pent up sorrow and pain, then as I chanced onto this site and decided to let out all my thoughts and feelings I found so much more. Wonderful people who with their help and support showed me I had so much more to say, more to express in many ways. Now I do and try to do so in simple words.
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you write well dear Sis of the deception
that does exist.. some are afraid
to face themselves in their skin
so to hide is just another game
so many words on a blank page
Bravo and well said also
well penned Hugs Angel♥
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Gotta agree with ya on this one,
though provoking write buddy!
Ken
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this is a very intense piece yet at the same time easy reading... i really enjoyed this piece but im wondering if in the line 'using a bunch of illusive metaphors' you meant elusive? a great piece,
hugs,
georgie,
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Yes, 'elusive' is the word. Corrected, thanks alot.
~Noor
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Parts of the whole
parts that do not fit in our day to day busy life's,
God surrounds us with diversity but most hide it,
it is when we write we share truth
in bits and pieces.
there is freedom in poetry
this is beautiful
I love your bits and pieces
God bless you my friend...
's for you
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