Ahhhh, it has been so long
since I rhymed, as if in song;
and since I've sung such melodies
in wingéd flight, headlong, free...
Some feel bound by words that rhyme,
they feel constrained, they feel confined;
me? I just let them fly-
i can fling them anytime...
Anytime, anywhere,
I'm typing this, and I don't care
what an uptight critic thinks,
what he wears, what he drinks;
Their stuffy pretense is a snort,
I just give them smart retorts
or flick an icky thing at them
and turn back to my rhymes again...
A contest entry
- Give Me Rhyme or Give Me Death 2 by NickRhyme.
650 points, ended August 13, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Still, the challenge...
is not the rhyme but saying something profound with the rhyme. Rhyming is easy, even a caveman can do it. You had a whole poem that rhymes. What memorable qualities does it have? Why would people remember it? Don't get me wrong. I liked the poem. It was fun. But rhymes are a dime a dozen. I do enjoy seeing all of that intellegence confinded in a rhyme, though. Keep penning.
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it may not be the words that are remembered, no matter how catchy, but the spirit...!
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Oh you booger brain you! You let this fly on the sly, and stuck it to the wall for all of us to see!!! you're quite the rhyming guy, so easy it comes with hardly a try...
you impressed the hell outta me.
laurie
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ewe! lol
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Great poem. I agree with you 100% and it's nice to know other people feel the same way as I do. The second stanza takes the words right out of my mind, lol. A lot of people don't like rhyme because they are limited at some points as to what words they can use, but I see it as a challenge, that's why I find rhyming more fun than freeverse. Great work and thank you for entering.
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yes, I think 199 out of my last 200 pieces have been freeverse, what a breath of fresh air here... lol
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I agree, I hate it when someone tells I must rhyme, or how to rhyme, or I must not rhyme. Just let me write. If it comes out rhyme great, if it doesn't fine, and if I do both and it still flows... pat me on the back for creativity. Like this a lot.
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I think psychologically that such controlling people saw one enviable poem and are searching for something like it again... the sad part is that a poem being 'enviable' means it has failed already in imparting anything beyond that...
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I guess I don't see it as controlling but that they are limiting their own scope of appreciation. Kind of like tasting something you like and not being willing to try new things. And a poem being 'enviable' is more in the eyes of the reader and if that's what the reader comes away with then they are ones who have lost out. The writer has not necessarily failed, unless of course that was their motivation to begin with, to impress with their style and form rather than the soul within the writing.
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yes, I think you nailed it on the 'impress'...!
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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thanks, now start flicking...
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