My heart is an old book
if you blow off on each beat
a dust will be dazzling your eyes
I am not sure you may play on its strings
it became so old and
full of the past memories
My heart is a look at an ancient yesterday
that you all chose to forget
but I did prefer to keep each detail
what can such a dainty heart do
I have already told that my heart is...
do you want to hear the missing part
I will stop at this very verse
maybe another heart will tell what I was unable to write down
What did you think
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this is so beautifully done.. its very profound dear. I loved it the way it is written. just a suggestion on the structure... just combine the first and the second para as one.
My heart is a look at an ancient yesterday- nice line.
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A delicate write....with a stunning theme and ending...Like it very much! Keep penning!
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Beautifully and mellifluously penned Han !!
Delightful and skillfully expressed thank you !
A pleasure to read on this night .. Take care ,
Best wishes & hugs , Friend Easy
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Thanks
Hi EZ,
Thanks for such a witnes. You are always welcome to read my poems
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A very creative use of metaphor--an old book. The poem clearly expresses feelings.
Its a very sweet poem. Well Done. -
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oh, I do appreciate every single word you wrote
THX
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A unique poem..I have often thought about our lives being pages in a book..You have taken this poem and used your imagination.Keep penning!
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Thanks
Your words are so beautiful and pushing to me to do better
Yours,
Han
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My missing part is you
Did you not know?
Without it,
I am absent of life
breath...
you...
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Good Inspiration
Good Inspiration you done to the missing part
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