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the stars we crushed




There are times when
We’ve little choice
In how we
Choose to fly.

The succulent stars,
Flutter
As we defenestrate
Our chance to dream.

As we obfuscate
Our simple minds,
We fail to realise
The complexity
Of soaring;
And in our imprudent
Rush to freedom;

We crush the stars
Beneath our feet..


Author notes

Prompts:
defenestrate - Verb. to throw out of a window
obfuscate - Verb. to confuse, bewilder, to make obscure or unclear, to darken.
succulence - Adjective. 1. full of juice; juicy. 2. rich in desirable qualities. 3. affording mental nourishment.
realization of complexity (title)

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