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Artistic Chaos

Given grace of clean slate
I wonder ...

Does this passage grant now
emotional charge?
To slut back up
to dirty the experiences?

Is not first clean impression
a choice?

Crushing colored chalk
on my blank board


 

In some measure
wickedly appealing

Stared at with skepticism...

 

They do doubt,

liking my bewilderment

Innocents or evil?

Amazed I even earned a devoid,
decisions, heighten pleasure


Yet...


Will be discovered 

 written with...


slow intimate refined
mess!






Author notes

"Blank"
the Smashing Pumpkins
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PNHsug1RYgg

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  • Andre ben-YEHU
    September 30

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    Interesting ponderings...


    An intriguing and stimulating flow of thoughts that strike the dynamo of imagination. "Artistic Chaos" shows a state of mind filtrate and refining words to express a clear imagery. Uniquely composed, "Artistic Chaos" glows.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

  • crazyscared
    September 9

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    this is pretty amazing, i love how the images just sprung out at me and how the first unanswered question made me question myself a little bit. i hope you keep writing like tis, x


  • Rovingone gold member
    August 15
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    You only got Silver? You deserved Gold. Fabulous, rich with image and beautifully written.


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    August 8

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    this is amazing ! well worth the gold,
    i don't know smashing pumpkins, but this write
    has its own merits without the prompt!
    can we say : Fabulous Darlin "

    Blessings and Love

    Rend


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 11
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      aww Rend!

      Thank you so much sweetheart!
      Hugs
      and love
      ~Lisa~


  • white stone
    August 8

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    So I've been here a few times to read... just analyzing the hell out of it, honestly. Really dig the take on the prompt... to blank and back again. I knew I was missing it the first few times, but I see the chaos and order mixing, which is really great. I like it that you didn't go for the obvious.

    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 11
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      WOW!

      Thank you White Stone for the silver, over here overjoyed, i was out of town and didn't see this till now! Yeah!
      I am very humbled ...
      Hugs
      ~Lisa~


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 6

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    Wow this is fantastic hun, you capture so much emotion in this piece and the words you chose to create the images were brilliant to say the least. best to you in the contest


  • Roland Welles gold member
    August 6

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    Very strong in so many ways... creative use of words and images sparked in the mind's eye... you can feel the "chaos" of "choices" and emotions... very aptly titled... love the use of "slut" and the ending fits so perfectly... loved it all!!!

    • Soft-Rain gold member
      November 11
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      I would really appreciate you being a good person and leaving Rend alone please!
      She has done nothing to you and i have not sent anyone. You are hurting people there is no need for any of this. In peace name i am asking nicely.
      Thank you!


  • Xianaria gold member
    August 6
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    loved it!


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    August 6

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    Love the thought processed here A journey of the mind! Very artistic


  • HereComesTheSun
    August 6
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    i love your use of slut as a verb, noun, and adjective.
    a great piece

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