Heated drizzle across my lips,
whispered order to gently lick,
has me softly moaning for more.
Your hiss of painful pleasure
followed by your plundering tongue,
licking off the chocolate
as your own fun begins.
Drizzled chocolate with whipped cream,
cherry sauce and pineapple
your eager tongue is busy,
my mouth on you as well.
Long slow licks,
drizzle more right there
then slowly clean it off
and with my mouth you share
Heated contrast suckled
from hardened nipple nubs,
roughened fingers hold me still,
vocal chords growling
passionate orders not to move.
Teasing 'til I'm squirming,
burning with sweetened heat,
begging for you to grant my
imminent release.
One final drop
placed upon the blossom.
Begging voice lifts in expectation.
One teasing breath,
scraping teeth,
a nip and probing tongue,
brings forth a mingling spring.
Chocolate and desire,
succulent sundae for a
special man.
A contest entry
- The Erotic Challenge (Round 2) by Master Ktulu.
450 points, ended August 17, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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hehehe ah chocolate and love kisses are well good
sexy ways to smile and all that jazz in life. but as i say in your contest page, to say you have to read my poetry is against ther site's rules, you can'r demand that in a cntest.
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A rich, luxurious entry into this round. Here is the technical breakdown of my opinion:
spelling/grammar/punctuation-19
Excellent.
presentation/creativity-20
The piece flowed well and the background colors are exquisitely well chosen and enhance the piece greatly.
how well you handled the challenge-20
Perfectly on all counts.
"grab me" effect-19
More prevalent in the beginning but it's great.
overall-20
Total-98
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Deliciously written...
spelling/grammar/punctuation-19
This was near perfect...one stanza;
Long slow licks,
drizzle more right there
then slowly clean it off
and with my mouth you share
Should have ended with a period, as all the others did.
Keep a watchful eye for this in the future rounds, as you will lose points everytime.
presentation/creativity-20
Well done!
how well you handled the challenge-20
All I can say is MMMM MMMM MMMM
"grab me" effect -20
overall-19
This was a near perfect entry. Keep up the excellent work and you will do well in this challenge.
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Total- 98
**Master Ktulu** -
mmmmmmm
yummy!, great minds think alike, and i hadn't even read yours yet!!! wonderful write, good luck in the contest!
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This had my mouth watering.
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Good! it should leave you slavering for chocolate and woman mixed.
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is anyone's for a curly-wurly!
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you know it! lolol
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