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Vein:Love

There is nothing like half a pint of blood
to fill the night with sky-lights and high-lights
and something that feels right and not right and
sick and perfect all in one hit.

I am cold, hot, insane, my veins have become
undone; a skull, peaceful and young.
Trust me, like you could trust a prison;
dance with blood and learn it's lesson.

I am blood; all seven -
caffeine plus, extra terrestrial Heaven
and stronger, and thicker, and harder than
l o v e.



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  • Nightmare0..o
    August 16
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    love the style of your wirting in this poem


  • lunarlunacy
    August 8
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    nice use of internal rhyme and one helluva strong closing.

    write on poet


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    August 7

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    This sounds to me like the thoughts and feelings of someone on a drug trip! Not sure if I am correct here though.
    I do like the imagery you have used. Thank you for entering my contest
    Gaylene


  • G-y-p-o
    August 6
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    Hmmmm... Babes.... Please tell me more in an email on what you where thinking whilst writing this poem.

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