one:
you were deadly, but only in large doses.
two:
you were everything.
three:
conflict resolved.
on the fourth night, the Bible broke and oaths were renounced. there was no separation of two lights in the sky; they made love. a bloodred sun lit up the heavens from dawn till dawn, and it was not beautiful. it was ugly, like fireflies shut in a jar until all the lights go out, vows said, I’m yours; with pills and a therapist I can lie to, I have no regrets.
you were not killing me, you were making me stronger.
four:
following through.
I praised the one who hurt me on a bed of broken fantasies. I knew that you were my everything. and I knew I didn't deserve this - the way the needlepoint sharpness of your eyes pierced through flesh and your words left bruises. you knew I couldn't leave and I knew it too,
and every day I stay, I develop more calluses on my eardrums and tear ducts. i ingest your ideas about my impurities until my insides scream for a love that doesn't hurt [but you do]. and yet my chest cavity only has space for one person-
the one set on watching its contents implode. my heart is a supernova in your gaze, and I wouldn't be anywhere else.
five:
why do I stay?
because I hurt less than I did yesterday. today I am stronger. tomorrow I will be painless, fearless. you will not kill me - I will be immune.
Author notes
Prompt: mithridatism - the practice of protecting oneself against a poison by gradually self-administering non-lethal amounts.
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Comments
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stunning. heart breaking and empowering all at once.
"you were deadly, but only in large doses"
the metaphors were fantastic.
kudos!
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wow..just wow..breathtaking piece.
I loved reading this.
"it was ugly, like fireflies shut in a jar until all the lights go out, vows said, I’m yours; with pills and a therapist I can lie to, I have no regrets"
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why do I stay?
because I hurt less than I did yesterday.
I love these lines.
stunning write.
thanks for entering.
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Really really good.. Pure emotion put upon naked white papir of darkness...
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very nice work. great take on the prompt-- very unique but still connected to the prompt. i like the way you sectioned it into the vignettes.
thank you for entering
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great take on the prompt. and the imagery was astounding. such emotion, such pain expressed so vividly.
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Amazing
Wow! This is brilliant! I love it! I think that the message that this poem is trying to get across is fantastic! I really love it! Once again brilliant write!
Midnight-tears
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WOW! This poem is great, I love the idea you used for this poem and you did justice for the prompt you used. The imagery and disciptions you used was great. I can't pick out just a single thing I liked best because I really enjoyed the entire piece. Best of luck in the contest!
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you were deadly, but only in large doses.
-hahah. i LOVE that. it's so fricken, i don't know. maybe humourous. bitter?
it's just good.
on the fourth night, the Bible broken
-i love that line, but is it 'the bible broke'?
why do I stay?
because I hurt less than I did yesterday.
-there is rhyme there, but don't change a thing. the succession of sentences is just astounding. great ending.
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it wasn't, but I changed it
I think it sounds better as "broke."
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