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Out, Out

Your guilt pushes out
from my insides:
a neat blackness,
tingling,
stretching my skin
so it should b r e a k
and I hang from it'
s hooks.

I scratch your bites
until they bleed;
I need to rid the poison.
Even if they scar--
they will--
I must out, out
this damn spot.

A contest entry

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  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 8

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    This is a short piece very few words say a lot great job with this one thanks for taking the time to enter our contest best to you always be well.


  • aboomer silver member
    August 7

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    I like the unique wording and images you have used in this. I honestly don't think there is anything that I would change - I like it the way you've done it.
    Nicely done.

    thank you for your entry
    best wishes in the contest


  • islekine gold member
    August 7
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    Thanks so much for entering!

    Best wishes in the contest and always! Hope to see your talents again! Write on...

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