Part by part; the lungs, the heart,
Were taken from the dead.
And in darkness, Victor stitched,
The brain into the head.
Lightning, thunder, shock of life,
The pale fingers twitched,
Made from human body parts,
But - by the beast - bewitched.
Things that once belonged to men
Were twisted in his plan,
Mutilated by his knife...
A monster, not a man.
A contest entry
- Third Round of the CREEPY, Dark Rounds Contest by Paloszoo.
1500 points, ended August 31, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Man, I read this poem yesterday, but I can't get it out of my head! It's so creepy and haunting it's stayed with me!
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You must read Frankenstein, if you haven't already.
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Oh, I have. I see you've got some great quotes from it as well.
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Really cool take on the prompt. Great visuals, and YES, it's definitely Frankenstein-ish! Thanks for following through on your commitment to the rounds contest! It was a pleasure and honor to read your work!
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Frankenstein with a twist. You packed a lot dark in three short stanzas.
And in darkness, Victor stitched,
The brain into the head.
It give's me the impression that Victor is the beast in the second stanza.Whare Wolf maybe? He would have to posess a Whare Wolves night vision to do brain surgery in the dark.
Good luck in the contest.
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I wasn't actually thinking of literal darkness.
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Wow, that's pretty damn good. Summing up Frankenstein's Monster in three short stanzas... at least when I read this that's what I was seeing. Great take on the title you chose! The rhyme, the flow, the visuals all terrific. I'm gonna have to make sure I write a killer poem for this round of the contest with competition like this! lol. Good luck with this great, vivid write!
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Excellent job.
I think this is excellent work, I regret you are in the same contest as I am. I give three applause which I do not do unless I am impressed, which I am... I do like your works a lot, I have read a few of them and I will read more now. Good luck in the contest and I will comment more, I like your style.
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ah, neat and nifty, this is based upon the films, not upon the novel, no? Liked it a ton!!
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I guess mostly on the one with Robert de Nero and Helena Bonham Carter since I just watched it recently. It was very close to the book though.
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Gah, well, I guess I can say well done on the creepy factor....gah! That sent an icey shivver down my back....It was really an interesting piece though. Full of emotion-provocing words. Very cool!
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this is great
wonderful and beautiful i love it
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I knew there was a reason I like you... wow holy freaking wow, this was short, simple and yet beautifly elegant at the same time. don't change a thing!!!
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