When I speak to you,
the stars come that much closer.
I'm a member of the human race again,
made whole by your loving words.
When we meet again,
I shall curl at your feet
and lick your toenails.
I want to brush your hair with my
tongue.
to create swirls in the air between
our kisses,
to scream at the top of my lungs
of the perfection of our relationship.
We end silence everywhere
with our meaningful looks, we
incite hearts to beat.
The anguished love again.
When I write you,
each letter draws faster
the memory of all that's
gone between us. A house
stands up within my mind.
In person, I'm carried away by
this pirate ship of feeling,
swept into an unthinking
land.
I cannot explain myself,
cannot remember who
I was before.
To speak with history fufilling
each thing I say, slowly,
in whole-ness and comfort.
The dust of history covers us.
Wholeness is another person accepting
your soul into themselves. We are bound.
The changing passions
the moment to moment,
the constant distractions,
the inadequate intrusion of work.
A personal life drives me crazy:
I desire the clarity of your expression.
Life written down is so elegant
and full of romantic purpose.
Author notes
some old notes I found.. from a word file from april 2004.
Has some of my old cliche style to it, but also an honesty and intensity that I have learned to admire when it happens 
A strange one, your thoughts?
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Oh. This is a pretty cool little poem that you have penned in here. I like it. I like how it's simple and you pop a few metaphor in here and there. I kind of felt like pirate ship metaphor seemed to be out of sync with the other imagery you were using but it wasn't bad or anything. That's about all the constructive criticism I can offer. I don't know much more myself.
I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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Quando falo com você,
as estrelas que vêm muito mais.
Eu sou um membro da raça humana novamente,
curado por suas palavras de amor.
Quando nos encontrarmos novamente,
Vou enrolar a seus pés
e lamber as unhas dos pés.
Eu quero escovar o cabelo com o meu
língua.
criar redemoinhos no ar entre
nossos beijos,
a gritar no topo de meus pulmões
da perfeição do nosso relacionamento.
Nós silêncio final em todos os lugares
com os nossos olhares significativos, temos
incitar os corações a bater.
O amor angustiada novamente.
Quando eu escrever-lhe,
cada letra chama mais rápido
a memória de tudo o que é
passou entre nós. Uma casa
ergue-se dentro da minha mente.
Em pessoa, eu sou levado por
o navio pirata do sentimento,
arrastada para uma irrefletida
terra.
Eu não posso me explicar,
não consegue se lembrar que
Eu era antes.
Para falar com história fufilling
cada coisa que eu digo, lentamente,
no todo-ness e conforto.
A poeira da história nos cobre.
Totalidade é outra pessoa aceitar
sua alma em si. Estamos ligados.
As paixões mudança
No momento a momento,
as distrações constante,
a intrusão inadequadas de trabalho.
A vida pessoal me deixa louco:
Eu desejo a clareza da sua expressão.
A vida escrita é tão elegante
e cheio de efeitos romântico.
I'm smiling, I really
lick that toe nails,
comb the hair with the tongue
and to finish:
You have every reason:
The world of writing is perfect,
Philosophy and romantic ... very well!
Congratulations (to laughter)
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Life written down is so elegant
and full of romantic purpose..........wow I love those lines..I relate to this so much right now
Thanks for sharing
T
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Thanks, glad to hear you liked it! I thought those lines felt a bit .. simple, but also very honest with simplicity...
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Wholeness is another person accepting
your soul into themselves. We are bound.
There is such power in this statement. Life feels incomplete without love, and giving of the soul. This seems to a reoccuring theme within the human condition.
Heartfelt read!
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this touched my recent thoughts
A personal life drives me crazy:
I desire the clarity of your expression
nice write and an enjoyable read,,, thanks for sharing it as well as your talent with the rest of here on ALLPOETRY... Michael
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My 1st Impression is that you have found
Someone to spend your whole life with. I love your note about an honesty and intensity "that is great" when it happens, been there and your poem says it all,
Thanks for the read. My Favorite is "
In person, I'm carried away by this pirate ship of feeling,
swept into an unthinking land."
You best go through your notes more often.
You Really do have a way with words.
Jackie
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This is amazingly displayed emotion floatingin the guise of word and together the present a picteresque delght for thesenses to savour.Thanks for sharing this magical verse on AP
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The intence emotions were very powerful
The poem itself drew a picture and carried you into
the wirters P.O.V
Lovely Job
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Wow, the imagery here is amazing. It took me into a story I almost didn't want to get out of! The toe nail part was a nice contrast to the more serious side of the emotions here. Your word usage is superb!
♥ kate
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LOL I enjoyed this piece, although, the licking toe nails almost had me running.
Nice poetry indeed.
Thanks for sharing this,
Passions
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AWESOME
wholeness is another person accepting your soul into themselves..by this we are bound and true love found...i would call this a soul mate
very good and filled with such tenderness from your heart...thank you kindly for sharing a little of you with me....
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Cool write
I have ta say I was so into this read and then you hit me with the toenails, and I was laughing yeah well all in all this is surely something that you can treasure, as you compare the simple things to mean much more meaning with this person..
well penned
\Zia,
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Very nice write. I can relate to alot in it. The lick your toenails part sounds awkward. This reminds me of the last few poems I've posted. Check em out.
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touching poem. didn't notice any cliches - loved "creating swirls of air between our kisses"
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I believe a lot of great poems are written with a lack of literary feats, because they are not created for the purpose of entertaining English majors or highly esteemed philosophers, but rather they are written for the sake of the writer. There was something that needed to be said, something that caused pain similar a slow death for the writer if the words were not written down. This piece has good balance of emotion and maturity. I think that you are a good poet as well as a good person. Your love of poetry and writing has become a major empire for those who need to find a little understanding and compassion. Thanks.
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Honest and intense it is. I admire that, too.
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This is great bud!
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The semi-colon in the title ...
is meaningful and effective: the poem breaks the silence in a neat way.
Whenever I read you, I become aware once again how important poetry is in emotional and spiritual growth; in getting to know the self and others. In this poem acceptance is a word of essence; interrelatedness in the ever changing process of old to new to old; to create the "house" of the soul, in its expression of love and its making of history, fleeting in clarity, but ever moving toward timelessness.
Introspective and peaceful in its pondering.
Beautiful.
Love
Myra
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That was cool dude but odd
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Lovely!
Aaah, ain't love grand! Poetry is the language of lovers, no other way comes close to expressing such feeling in words; this is proof 
Love your opening stanza and closing lines
(Couple of typos in the last stanzas: 'constant' and 'clarity')
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eek, typos, thanks!
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Brilliant stuff
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I find this very beautiful and uniquely romantic..
thank you for the read today..
and may you have a wonderful evening or day or what have you there..
with smiles..
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