Beautiful dreamer, wake unto me,
Nightmares and monsters are waiting for thee;
Sounds of the rude world, heard in the day,
Lull'd by the moonlight have all but gone away!
Beautiful dreamer, queen of my song,
List while I kill thee with soft melody;
Gone are the scars of life's busy throng,
Beautiful dreamer, awake unto the nightmare!
Beautiful dreamer, awake unto the nightmare!
Beautiful dreamer, out on the sea
Mermaids are chaseing after thee;
Over the streamlet toxic vapors are borne,
Waiting to fade at the daybreak.
Beautiful dreamer, wake with a start,
E'en as the morn on the streamlet and sea;
Then will all clouds of happiness depart,
Beautiful dreamer, awake unto the nightmare!
Beautiful dreamer, awake unto death!
Author notes
A slight twist on the rhyme Beautiful dreamer
A contest entry
- Nursery Rhyme Hell by annother.
1050 points, ended August 21, 2009, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Slight?
Just a tad bit more than "slight" I'd say. With a smile of course
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?????? huh im lost as to what you mean atm? Oh nvm lol. I think I get it. Pardon me as I am suffering from blonde atm. It kept the basic same lines just turned it to something darkier lol. At least it wasn't gorey or sexual for a change (grins michevously I need more sleep and less caffinee atm)
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Lovely job, great imagery in your write. Best of luck in the contest.
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Glad you enjoyed it.
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strong sea imagery, maybe up the ante of the sky symbolism in the first half to match.
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Any suggestions on how? I tried to leave the rythme as close to the oringal as possible.
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