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Precious Dreamer



Sleep refuses to come
as the living nightmares
seep into her being
uninvited.


She wishes upon
the warm night sky
for things she knows
can only happen in her dreams.


Within a year,
she hopes to earn freedom
from the choices she
doesn’t get to make.


This next month,
she wants to be allowed
a new start with everyone
she ignorantly condemned.


Tomorrow
she’ll settle with pain.
But tonight,
she only begs for sleep.


Oh precious dreamer,
sleep won’t rescue you tonight.










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I wrote this last night when I couldn't fall asleep. Could you tell?

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 31

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    I thought it was great

    You penned this with cuh a view of one so begging for sleep to reach the dream realm where magic still exists


  • ShesEveryonesAngel
    August 7

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    AMAZING.

    Almost everyone I know could relate to this poem
    my favorite stanza was
    "Within a year,
    she hopes to earn freedom
    from the choices she
    doesn’t get to make."

    I can think of nothing to make this poem better.


    • LovelyTraces
      August 7
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      Yah, haha, I know quite a few people who could relate also. XD.
      Thankyou so much for the comment! =]