Olive goddess
Possessing beauty far surpassing any competitor
Behold a Grecian wonder
With shimmery bronze skin
Shiny, copper locks
Warm a face of seductive innocence
Glistening eyes of emerald
Could hinder the thoughts of any man
Strawberry lips
Form words of the sweetest prose
Resembling music
When they glide from her tongue
A symphonic masterpiece
For eager ears to heed
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Everyone wins points!! Quickie by spiritraven.
650 points, ended August 9, 6 entries
Honorable mention
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400 points, ended November 25, 61 entries
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What did you think
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once again, you did a stunning job.
thanks for entering the contest and best of luck.
write on.
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That's great. Very good. It's great.
Good luck!
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Shiny, copper locks
Warm a face of seductive innocence
Glistening eyes of emerald
Could hinder the thoughts of any man
Strawberry lips
Form words of the sweetest prose
I loved your description!!!! it was beautiful.
Thanks for entering.
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You used wonderful descriptions in this.
"Olive goddess"
though very simple was one part that did make me want to read again and as it's the first line it give a very strong opening for the rest of the write.
Thanks for entering
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good poem, very descriptive. I would have liked it to be more then a description though... Good imagery, good metaphor. If you added punctuation , it would better the flow. Overall an adequate poem
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Much Better!
I love that. A final couplet really does have to have something about it, and that's a beautiful one. Congratulations on making the prelims! -
good luck!
I love how proud you must be of this poem to enter it so often! I love the second to last line, but I think the last line is weak in comparison. "A symphonic masterpiece" presents a lovely description, but "for all to enjoy" could end any poem. Feel free to revise, but other than that very well done!
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i love it it makes me think of a person being put up for the slave markets and people seeing her for what she is BEAUTIFUL
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(: yes.
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WONDERFUL imagery entwined into your words! I think more puncuation could've assisted the flow. I myself am a fan of the olden-day cultures.
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beautiful imagery, and i just happen to LOVE greece so this one was definitely perfect to me! if you wanted to revise this, i would say space it out differently. maybe try your hand at a little DP in here, and make it more eye-appealing, instead of just beautifully written.
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Thanks for the comment! I love Greece too. Although I have never been there. It's my dream to go.
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This is very nicely penned and chocked full of imagery...! I liked that about it, biut sadly, it's not what I was expecting in this contest. (I do however, adore this piece.) Thanks so much for entering and for sharing this wonderful write with me.
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Well done
Very nice descriptive words which lead to good imagery. Smooth read.
Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck
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lovely. very impressionistic. almost like you're casting a spell (which i guess someone already cast on you
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aaaaanyhow, i would say its just about perfect except the second line... its kind of jarring and doesn't really fit the flowiness of the rest. you make me want to meet her
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creative beautiful great flow and expression. Good job! -
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thanks!
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well expressed. Best of luck in the contest
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Great description!
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thx!
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wonderful imagery I got from this..such short lines that does quite a lovely job describing a vivid image
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Damn that was beautiful. I loved the imagery in this. You did a fantastic job. Best of luck in the contest(s)!!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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nice job painting this picture here. i do like "glistening eyes of emerald could hinder the thoughts of any man" - connects with me anyway. good poem.
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