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Eternal Request

Stars collide  
Resulting in a celestial shimmer
Painting by-standing lovers
With romanticizing glows

Underneath the natural theater
Of the grandest art
Who could resist cupids' effects?

Not I

Only those in possession of frozen souls

Oh God!
When he kisses me
The hallelujah chorus
Resounds throughout the heavens
Who knew I would find an earth bound angel
To call my own
Eternity with him is all I ask
Could I have this kiss forever?

Author notes

Prompt: I would give anything in the world for that kiss to last forever
20-100 words

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A contest entry

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  • poets whisper silver member
    September 12

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    Resulting in a celestial shimmer ... what a beautifully poetic phrase. It is filled with brilliant imagery that the reader can easily visualize. Great work and thank you for entering the contest.


  • PaintedParisPassion
    August 27

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    Stars collide
    Resulting in a celestial shimmer
    Painting by-standing lovers
    With romanticizing glows

    Underneath the natural theater
    Of the grandest art
    Who could resist cupids' effects?

    Not I

    Only those in possession of frozen souls

    Oh God!
    When he kisses me
    The hallelujah chorus
    Resounds throughout the heavens



    Oh I loved that, I just thought you should know lol

    ♥


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    August 17
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    Very moving!
    Thanks for entering and best of luck!


  • epitome
    August 12
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    Good Luck!

    I liked the rhythm this poem had, but some of your description lacked originality in my eyes. Thanks for entering.
    Good luck.


  • GinryuStargazer
    August 10

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    Ah~

    Lovely and very cute way to put a lover's words. ^^ I liked the flow personally, but I thought it was a little off in the middle section. (Just me, though. )

    ^^ ^^


  • BlindingLove
    August 10
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    This was very sweet

    poems like this are the main reason I opened this contest
    very nice work

    ::Good Luck::

    xoxo

    xxScarletBeautyxx


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    August 9

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    This is both beautiful and sweet. I can feel the passion, the fire. Last stanza is my favorite. Wonderful write you have here. Thank you so much for entering.


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    August 6
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    Aw, pretty!


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    August 5

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    Sweet! That is amazing. You did a fantastic job with this. I especially love that last stanza. I could feel the fire. Best of luck in the contest(s) and congratulations on your shiny new trophy!!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • songstress80
    August 5

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    congrats on the bronze trophy!
    a very beautiful and romantic poem. extremely passionate towards your lover and the kiss you share that is so deep and sweet, you long for more and NEED it to last forever. time seems to stand still when you are with the one you love with all your heart. moments of true love last forever in our hearts. keep on writing!

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    August 5
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    Beautifully romantic, thank you for entering and good luck in my contest, Josie


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 5

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    So gorgeously penned hun...
    I love where you went with this prompt;
    so tender and passionate. You always
    exert so much emotion in your writes
    and it just sparkles!

    Congrats on the bronze


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    August 5
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    Very nice Marisa!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    August 5
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    Awesomenessss

    Me likey.


  • Kari gold member
    August 5
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    You did great!

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