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Time To Go Baby

This is a resolution
Your conflict is my depth perception.
I see all that we have gotten from the world
This is a self satisfaction.

You are a staged distraction
Play me to move yourself.
Our hearts want to join and i feel the air break
This is self mutilation.

We cover each others faults and we let falsehoods slip away
But when the train comes to carry, we strain to undo the wrappings.
This is my perception that i have come to know.
The train is here....
Baby...It's time to go.

Nah, it's not obvious at all

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  • HorrorFiend
    September 2

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    You may not always understand others work, but certain parts can make you feel...something. Anything. When that happens it doesn't matter what they're talking about, just that it gave you some kind of emotion.

    We cover each others faults and we let falsehoods slip away
    But when the train comes to carry, we strain to undo the wrappings.

    These lines meant something to me. Well done.


  • ShadowEyes
    August 11
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    This is a pretty good piece. I like how you wrote it. Keep up your amazing work!

    Shadoweyes (The shadoweyed demon!)


  • Random Renee
    August 10
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    i like the ending