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The Cygnet's Wish

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Adorned in down the cygnet bold  
swam anxious bursts in wait;
by rippled sun she knew her favoured hour.
To shore her daily boy was due
with smuggled crumbs in hat;
his spoken words as soft as manna offered.

 

 

From pond she’d watch him leap and climb
in autumn leaves and tree.
She tried to hear his thoughts at rest in daisies.
For there he’d lay with eyes to sky
upon the hillside slant;
as though in wish and lost on a blissful dream.

 

 

Where groups of boys would shout aloud
names attached to torments,
unknown alone her boy would play in silence.

 

 

A cygnet’s fate is set to swan
yet dear she loved the boy.
Her every wish was cast to be a girl child.
By night she dreamed of ribbons loose
in hair with angel curls.
To share his hand in run and playful laughter.

 

 

Law of nature dashes hope;
no boy endears to swan.
By night her heart as playground echoed empty.

 

 

An autumn moon shines magic light
in perfect cloudless weather;
to grant the wish of a heart most true in love.
That night it found the cygnet bold,
it dreamed to her conditions.
Its words as though a whisper in her mind:

 

 

“Your cygnet soul with a girl child fair
can blend by morning light,
though consequence will bare if you should will it.
Never shall you grow to swan.
You are to dwell forever,
within the girl whose soul with yours entwines."

"As time for play with the gentle boy
a single day is offerred. 
You then must leave the playground quickly silent.
For as you pass beyond it’s gates
every cygnet memory;
will never be recalled in thoughts remembered."

"Twenty years must pass in mark
where-by there’s no return;
and only after such by mystery’s urge."

"Far away from the playground pond,
past blooms of mauve and blue,
beyond the lazy creeks in grassy farms.
it’s there your childhood years will fade,
for if you break conditions,
your soul will never find the boy's aligned."

"Even he must play his part
to prove his love is worthy.
He must behold your touch as treasured dear”

 

 

The voice in dream was brought to hush;
she knew her choice so certain.
In sweetened sleep her cygnet heart fell peaceful.

 

 

The moon gave way to morning sun,
'til it rose to the favoured mark.
Her daily boy arrived to feed the swans.

 

 

She skipped towards in humming song
then stopped upon approach;
"I like your hat," she chuckled bold in mischief.

Author notes

This is a prelude piece to another poem of mine titled "The girl without a name" which has subsequently had, what was, a second part written from it. The part II is written and posted by another poet; albymyheart and is titled "What's your name". By posting this poem/installment; "The Cygnet's Wish" I guess Part II now becomes Part III.

This prelude was written to provide a platform of reason and explaination behind the elements contained in the other poems. I hope it successfully achieves this and brings an element of fairytale magic to the story.

If you would like to read the other poems after this one, here are the links:

The girl without a name: http://allpoetry.com/poem/5267999
What's your name: http://allpoetry.com/poem/5303085

I would be thrilled if people take time to read the whole story and each poem will make far more sense if the others are read also.


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  • Darianna
    November 7

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    I read the second first and oh how much more depth is there to it now! Dear sir, you weave a fairytale as magical as fairy dust! It sparkles with longing and tingles with hearts desire to be loved! I love it thus far!!! *sigh*

    Dari xxx


    • Garmond gold member
      November 7
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      I can't help but smile... these were great fun to write and I really get a kick when others enjoy reading them too.

      I hope you have or will read part three also.

      Thank you so much for reading for these.


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 28

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    I looked for a new one, then i found this
    incrediable write oh my sss you are a
    blessings and a gift to this site,

    love to you

    Rend

    • Garmond gold member
      October 28
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      But it is only part 1 Rend I hope you find the time to read 2 & 3 sometime too, this one makes far more sense when you read the whole story

      Thank you for your kind words and for reading me. It is always great to find you have me paid a visit.


  • stef-witt gold member
    August 19

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    I'd love to stay and comment this with more detail... but I'm pretty keen to get moving to the next two...

    But this is beautiful... I love the way you express and phrase your writing. It's so beautiful and rhythmic. SO easy to read and get roped into.


    • Garmond gold member
      August 19
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      Read on, read on. It's good to know that you are 'roped in'
      Thank you for reading.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 6

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    Long and detailed, with a seemingly instingtive feel for a poetic voice, now I have to go and read the others

    Jeff

    • Garmond gold member
      August 6
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      Humble thanks for your 'click' and for these gracious and encouraging words Sir.

      I do love sharing the entire tale, it would be an honour to share each of them with you and gleam your thoughts. I would make a wild guess towards you liking the third part the most.... because it is written by a poet far more talented than myself.

      I tip my hat to you.


  • rkohn
    August 6
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    lovely

    cygnet indeed


    • Garmond gold member
      August 6
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      Thanks so much for reading... sincerely appreciate it.


  • I.am.the.sun.
    August 6

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    haha, thanks a lot for posting! im not normally one for really long writes, but this one was different, i enjoyed myself the whole way though, thanks, and i look forward to reading the next!

    • Garmond gold member
      August 6
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      No sir... thank you for reading my long poem. I'd be stoked if you read the others... everything makes far more sense. I dare you

      Thanks heaps man.

  • Great poem. I especially liked the last 3 lines.

    • Garmond gold member
      August 5
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      Thank you. If you read the first three lines of the next poem... they would make even more sense

      Thank you for clicking and reading, I truly appreciate it.

  • Eusebius
    August 5

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    yes, strong elements of high fantasy here, and much of the poem, is, as you suggest a tad arcane to the reader, but you've done a fine job here I think on a very ambitious project...

    • Garmond gold member
      August 5
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      Well now that I have looked up the word 'arcane' yes indeed. It does prove tricky to write a poem that can stand on it's own when it is also just a part of a bigger story..... well tricky for me anyway.
      I am honored to have you here and appreciate you reading this and sharing your thoughts. 'Tis only my muse who has ambition.... I feel as though you may have sensed my mind and heart with this one though.
      Gracious and many thanks.

  • wow, and oh my goodnesss, I love this, there is an aching breathtaking beauty somehow intertwined with this, stirs me somehow in world which i cannot quite define, this is the mark of true poetry and therefor also the mark of a true poet
    bravo my friend
    you have very real talent, and btw, you have no idea just how badly i needed to read this today, or how deeply it touched me
    thankyou again
    T

    • Garmond gold member
      August 5
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      It is so good to now have your thoughts added to this poem, knowing they are there with the other two poems also. I am so pleased you liked this one and even more pleased it was just the escape you needed today. Almost as though some of the magic in the poem found you too
      Thank you so much for reading and for this wonderful comment.


  • vmu9
    August 4

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    Law of nature dashes hope;
    no boy endears to swan.
    By night her heart as playground echoed empty.

    The poem is beautiful and really pulls the reader in. Its romance is beautiful! Great work

    • Garmond gold member
      August 4
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      If I make you a coffee will you take some time out and read all three then?

      Thank you so much for reading this and I love your comment, I would love to think it draws the reader in. My pleasure to have shared this with you.


      • vmu9
        August 4
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        No need for coffee I will read them all! It reminds me of an old fable


        • Garmond gold member
          August 4
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          Thank you...I really do love sharing this 'fable'


  • shiratikva
    August 4

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    You have done a wonderful story my friend.
    I loved all of three parts...
    I'm happy I found you...
    Your romantic mind put into words so much passion...

    • Garmond gold member
      August 4

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      Hello Oh I am so glad you read the others!!!! That is the absolute best accolade you can offer. Thank you, thank you, thank you. I love sharing the parts.. but it means so much more to share the whole tale.
      I am so pleased you found me too and I truly appreciate you reading me and for this great comment.


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 4
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    This is a lovely penning, Poet. It especially touched me since my nickname is Swan, and my hometown is McPherson. Hmmm...such a curious little coincidence, ehhh? Beautifully, tenderly penned.

    • Garmond gold member
      August 4
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      No way?!?!?!?!? WOW!!! That IS a totally remarkable coinky dink. I am so impressed someone has finally named a town after me and placed a lovely swan there.

      I am so glad you shared this chanced oddity with me and really appreciate you clicking this, reading me and leaving such a lovely comment.

      Pure thanks.

      • Night Hope gold member
        August 4

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        It was actually named after General James T. McPherson, a war veteran (Civil War, maybe? Kansas wasn't quite settled or a state yet). Either that, or they were very psychic. And yes, they DO have swans at Lakeside Park. Not just a town, but an actual county seat, so you should be proud.

        • Garmond gold member
          August 4
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          A comment and a history lesson! You must pardon my ignorance though... I know very little of the United States or it's geography anyway. Everything I know I learned from television.... Kansas is just all about Dorothy and the Wizard of Oz to me
          I think I will run with them being very psychic
          Glad to hear you have swans though... they really are beautiful.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 4

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    very nice. I like how you wrote it... though I did get lost at first, then I re-read it and got unlost. lol. Very nice. keep up your great work

    TwiztidMaggot ♥

    • Garmond gold member
      August 4
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      You got lost? You should have seen me writing it jk

      I really appreciate you taking the time to read this...(twice) and I am glad you found your way through it in the end. You are welcome to IM me if you know where and why or in which places you became lost.

      Many many thanks for your comment.


  • sweet arrival gold member
    August 4

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    ... and i thought you said it was going to be long. umhmmm.
    i didn't want this to end. is there a way i can crawl between the words and rest? or at least watch this unfold? the playfulness, the longing and ache to be with someone, and not just anyone, but one you know is good and true. there is a genuine pulling of my heart. i want to frolic upon those shores and grab the hat, mess up his hair, and run like mad. lol

    i half expected this to rhyme, but wow, the smoothness of the freeverse was wonderful. you always seem to give me a good feeling, a happy smile, and a need to read your next posting.

    • Garmond gold member
      August 4
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      Well you can pull off the hat... but I warn you he is going to have diabolical hat hair

      Yes it appears we both got infected with the 'long write' bug huh? But because I have tried to match this into the other poem I did not do rhyme, the other was written in the same style as this.

      Nice to know it tugged at your heart... that is a great thing to have shared. To know this gave you a good feeling blended with a happy smile..... well now I remember why I started writing poetry.

      Always great to share my writes with you, thank you for everything you shared here.

  • Excellent

    It is a very fine write, indeed, for you have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • albymyheart gold member
    August 4

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    Oh my goodness!!!

    The Cygnet's wish...unbelievable! You are a true story writer. What a magical write as a precursor to your other enchanting poem 'The Girl Without A Name'. The idea that the cygnet's spirit merges with the girl's is adorable; then you link the poems with the perfect conditions placed on the cygnet, if she is to have her wish granted. Such fairytale fantasy of the best and fairest kind! This brought huge smiles to my face, and it was a wonderful surprise to see a new addition to your write. This story just keeps getting better and more complete. It feels whole now.

    I love how you make Andy different from the other boys...a more reflective soul, and the way you eased your words into the moon's whisper is seamless. Finishing with with beginning lines of (the now) Part II was a great idea, and begs the reader to move on to the next installment.

    Thanks so much for the mention of my installment in this story too. I am just blown away my friend. Smiles beaming all 'round. Alby

    • Garmond gold member
      August 4
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      Thank you my dear Sister,

      I am really pleased to know you enjoyed this and I am glad to know you think it does the others (including yours) justice.

      Oh Alby... Andy is different alright, no doubt about that

      Also glad you mentioned the way I finished this one.... I thought it would help it loop straight into the next.

      Having your comment here now makes it feel finished, thank you Sis.

  • magical, beautiful!

    It would usually be difficult to keep alert and read through the end, but I honestly didnt want this one to end, I loved every line and phrase of your beautiful writing, and I am sure you have enjoyed writing this very marvellous piece! Definitely I would love to read the other two poems, thanks for guiding us there, that would certainly help. i loved the reference of smuggled crumbs in hat, dreaming of ribbons loose and sweetened sleep too, and just how you end the poem " i like your hat" i just loved this magical piece, and how you brought the cygnet to so much life, and how much her daily boy loved feeding them, its all a wonderful woven piece.

    Thanks for sharing

    lencio

    • Garmond gold member
      August 4
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      Thank you for this wonderful comment my friend. I really hope you can find the time to read the others, the references you mentioned will make so much more sense when you understand why they are mentioned in this one.
      Thank you again for everything you said here and for reading me.

      • Wow, I think I knew it, Oh god, its the beginning part of your other write - and that was marvellous, I like both equally, and if you go on.., I am sure they will all be good.


  • darkyinsoul
    August 4

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    What a wonderful magical
    peice...
    well done my friend
    Thanks for the share
    Darky

    • Garmond gold member
      August 4
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      Thank you my friend.... and a rather long read huh? Thank you for taking the time to share this one, always great to find you at the bottom of my poems

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