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Here's looking at you...

Together.
Like a pack of wolves.
Staring down those who dare to look first,
We make our way to the bathroom.

Vanessa puts on lip gloss.

Trisha holds the door.

Scat under-hands Jess paper from her stall.

I'm helping Tina tie her shirt.

"Can you believe this?"

Someone wrote: Stacey loves Joey
  2 be 2 getha 4 eva.

"How stupid is that? I can't even imagine the type of person who would write this filth"

I said "Does it have one of those for a good time call so and so"

"Ah...no." She said.

I grab the eyeliner from Scat's bag.

My friends sat in disgust when the wall read...

"If your looking for a good time call me anytime #5085555555 And ask for
Tiny Peter"

 

God, I just love eyeliner, but not the Ex.





 

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prompt line: "I read the graffiti in the bathroom stall"

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  • Tzipora
    August 8
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    loll. very humorous.


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    August 7

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    A coworker of mine was in the womans bathroom at work the other day and told me there was a stall in there that read "I WAS EATEN OUT IN THIS STALL...BY A GIRL!" lol this reminded me of that. Funny.


  • DeJaBlue gold member
    August 6

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    Haha! This is freakin' hilarious!!
    I'm still smiling....
    I get kicks out of things written on
    bathroom walls, lol
    Sad, huh?


  • Cup-a-Joe
    August 5

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    Ok so are you Stacey ? lol
    I see stuff written like this and often wonder who would write it.
    Now I know

    Joe


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 4

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    L.O.L.

    WOW this was funny! i loved the ending but the rest was great too..great imagery my friend, and super good storytelling wish it was longer though..


  • AngeloftheNight
    August 4
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    lmao!!! Really funny poem! Thanks, I needed a laugh! GREAT and entertaining write!

  • mcfreeman
    August 4
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    a found poem....

    life has its gifts


  • TheLyricsArePoetry gold member
    August 4
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    excellent... just excellent big giggles!


  • still.she.waits
    August 3
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    no words, just clappies and a laugh.


  • Cannonsfire
    August 3

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    lol you know sometimes there is some very witty stuff in bathrooms, I saw one once that read 'I used to be apathetic' to which someone had put underneath 'And now you're not so sure' LOL...


  • A-Solitary-Fantasy
    August 3

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    hmmm.... i like it, i wasn't sur eif i would get any humorous takes from this song but here comes the comic releif! haha exs number on the bathroom stall...been there doen that...haha


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    August 3

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    This was so humorous! It totally rocked....... the last line was brilliant...!
    Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!


  • white stone
    August 3

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    Damn it! You rocked it... way better than mine... frickin' hilarious and the attitude is perfect. Good luck. www.youtube.com/watch?v=1hYV-JSjpyU&feature=related

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