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~Fall~

Missing image

 

 

 

Lying here

in the dim light hours of early

morning, hands so lovingly

brush against my skin.

 

 

 

your lips tenderly touch my

shoulder as you whisper in

my ear.

 

 

 

We lay wrapped in tangled

sheets, feeling more alive than

we’ve felt in years. 

 

 

 

Softly you move strands of hair

aside that have fallen across my

face pulling me closer for another

memorable kiss,

 

 

 

I know you love me [us, this].  

you and me, we are what

we’ve just made, “Love”.

 

 

 

Lost,

in the rolling tides of our hunger, we

devoured all those myths, mysteries

of each other. 

 

 

 

Soft moans escaped our lips

as hands and mouths create fires

so hot, brilliant, our cravings are

left unquenched.

 

 

 

 

until….

I begged for every part of you

to set me free, and only then… only then

did you take me on wave, upon waves

of ecstasy.

 

 

 

Now

lying in your arms,

here in the early morning hours

a feeling beyond what I could ever

hoped or imagined

 

 

 

Tears of overwhelming love

for you

 

 

 

fall

 

 

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  • Sydney Carton
    November 16

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    I won't lie, this style usually isn't my bag, but after reading this one I may have to change my mind. I'm not a very sensitive person, but somehow you managed to make me feel something.


  • sgking123
    November 14

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    stunning

    loved this completely:
    Lost,

    in the rolling tides of our hunger, we

    devoured all those myths, mysteries

    of each other.
    guess I am becoming regular at your poems


  • jackreed3 gold member
    October 27
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    Nice.. gold cup... must be a lucky dog to
    be in your sheets... JackReed3...


  • chael
    October 12

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    Damn,

    You always take me on a visual journy. Move me from someplace deep, deep down inside. A place I usually keep closed off and unavailable. You stir me, and I thank you for your ability to do so. I love this erotic adventure.....chael


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 12
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      well thank you,
      i am glad i am able to stir you, see all hope is not lost My artsy friend,
      you give me complements that humble me,

      love and blessings

      Rend


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 12

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    So...another gold...You seem to know how to get response from your readers with your characterizations of love your style....Congratulations! M.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 12
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      Thank you so much Mom,
      your encouragments me the world to me s
      love to you

      Rend


  • Xianaria gold member
    August 26
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    Congrats on the Gold, Rend!

    ~ Tim

  • Awww, this is just beautiful and so very moving, it really spoke volumes to me in reading, thank you and good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Camille Morin gold member
    August 24
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    I am swept up and taken away with this piece, Rend. How absolutely lovely.
    Love,
    Camille

  • Topnotchsy
    August 23
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    Beautiful write from beginning to end!!


  • Serenity-words
    August 21
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    Beautiful, not much else can be said for such beauty.


  • Amera gold member
    August 18
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    sigh.......

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Glasyalabolas
    August 12

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    Another sensual, tender and beautifully loving piece.To borrow the word 'wave' from the piece, the whole thing does leave the reader riding a wave of emotion, visuals and imagery when they can relate to the piece, if they have ever been in a similar situation and experienced the same thing themselves.

    On a side note....I'll need to start avoiding your sensual/adult pieces....they lead to far too many provocative thoughts.

    Good write.


  • ShortMonkey
    August 10

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    I love this. I have these exact feelings when I actually do 'couple' with my boyfriend to be more.... pg with my words. I love it... and I actually did get caught up in it. I felt every emotion, and that as if it were me doing all of this. I love it, keep up the good work.


  • doolie gold member
    August 9

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    WOW!!!

    Such a fantastic write, full of great imagery and emotions. You've outdid yourself on this one, sis. It reads like gold to me...Best of luck in the contest.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      September 16

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      gosh darn it i am soooo behind!!
      please forgive me sis,
      thank you so much for stopping
      to comment and the clappies
      muah!!
      with love and blessings

      Rend


  • DeadToMe
    August 8
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    I liked it


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    August 7

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    Oh gosh this is so incredibly beautiful. I loved this. It was sweet and touching and beautiful. You did a fantastic job on this. Best of luck in the contest!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • melroxanne
    August 7

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    You have captured love; both physical and emotional all in one beautiful painting of words. BRAVO!!!!


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    August 7

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    You have penned an amazing piece here, sensuality oozes across the page flowing Into the reader
    Well Done


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 7
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      thank you so much for coming by,
      your encouragement means alot

      your work is incredible

      Blessings always

      Rend


  • Kathrin silver member
    August 7
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    wow

    this was intense i agree totally with the above comments, well done and thanks for sharing

  • intense.


  • Danzy007
    August 7

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    interesting....
    and hope you had fun lol


  • catz Moderators member
    August 7

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    This is one of the most exquisite sensual poems I've read. Your expressions of love and gentle lust are what we all long for. Fortunate are those of us who can personally relate to your words, your feelings... even us old fogies who are still living those kinds of moments.

    A beautiful poem, and I wish you best of luck in the contest. This is f=definitly Gold material

    Dee


  • marijane917
    August 7
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    deep

    this is very deep and i love it.!

  • refinnej
    August 6

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    "I know you love me [us, this].  
    you and me, we are what
    we’ve just made, “Love”. "

    I love that part...feelings makes all the difference.
    WOW!!! Great poem. very sensual.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 7
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      thank you so much for stopping,
      to read, I am glad you liked it
      Blessings

      Rend

  • novak8
    August 6

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    That is fantastic. You really were able to capture the most intimate moment a couple can have, just the two of you lying in bed, happy to be with each other, to see each other. If that's not heaven, I don't know what is.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 7
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      thank you for your comment.
      i try to captured heaven, and it sure does feel
      good, ....

      Blessings

      Rend


  • DeJaBlue
    August 6

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    This is beautiful.
    So full of love and sensual tenderness.
    You have penned a stunner, sweetie.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 6

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    Wow. This is a very good piece! Just the right bit of sensual, I love it! I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Keep up your awesome work!

    Twiztidmaggot ♥


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 6

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    mmmm, well done, capturing so much emotion and intimacy of a early morning embrace in an unmade bed. good poem.


  • csmmoms2
    August 6
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    Move over Dalaney there's a new kid in town and her breasts are just a bustin' to tell the hot. -c


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 7
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      i went to read your page, and to see whom was giving me such
      a grand compliment( i am humbled Sir by the way ) , i am please to tell you i ran away to San Fransico too, a great place to run to, i have Loved that place for as
      long as i could remember, The Mission, California St, The Zoo. Top of the Hill
      China Town, the best smoke duck around, that town loved me!
      and Ghirardelli square please let me not forget that !!
      thank you so much for giving such Kudos, as much as i am honored
      Dalaney will always stand alone, she reigns

      Blessings and Love

      Rend


  • individuality gold member
    August 6

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    well i must admit you look and sound sexy and it is a turn on but...
    i see this all the time in poetry, using the body to entice the mind. life and love, it is all a crazy fecked up shape whcih we have no control over.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 8
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      such is life my friend, in all actuallity my actions are more expressive
      then my words can ever be one day they will meet in the center of the road
      and my writes wont be so ordinary, thank you for stopping to comment and
      for the clappies i am most blessed

      Rend


  • Dixie Dawn gold member
    August 6

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    I come to read your work of love and love making, for it gives me what I don't have, its perfect, your talent is amazing and superb, sigh.......


  • Wolfdog silver member
    August 6

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    Excellent

    'tis a very fine write, indeed, with just the right touch of sensuality. You expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 6
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    This is a beautiful piece! I like it. I wish you the best of luck... Keep up your great work!

    TwiztidMaggot

  • This is a really beautiful write! The discriptions you used are just amazing! I hope you win the contest you deserve a gold for this piece. My favorite part of this is
    "I know you love me [us, this].  
    you and me, we are what
    we’ve just made, “Love”. "
    and
    "until….
    I begged for every part of you
    to set me free, and only then… only then
    did you take me on wave, upon waves
    of ecstasy. "
    Again best of luck in the contest!




  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    August 5

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    Simply Beautiful!

    This is absolutely beautiful my friend!
    I love reading your work here! This is filled with a lot
    of emotions and imagery. Something that we all wish
    to feel everyday of our lives. You have a wonderful way of
    expressing yourself through your words. It's always a pleasure to read
    you and I congratulate you on being Today's Featured Poem! Well done
    my dear and I look forward to your next one! Take care and thanks
    a lot for sharing this!





    Jeremy0826

  • Wonderful

    Gentle love, everlasting and pure
    Of one to another, Both are so sure

    Kisses shared as souls join together
    Life to live as one, Always and forever

  • Only once have I felt like this. And it now seems so very long ago. Wonderful write. I really enjoyed it. My favorite part was:


    "

    Now

    lying in your arms,

    here in the early morning hours

    a feeling beyond what I could ever

    hoped or imagined







    Tears of overwhelming love

    for you







    fall"



    I love this so much. It feels so right. Thank you for sharing.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 8
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      your so very welcome,
      as i am flatered that you have
      enjoyed thank you so much
      for stopping by
      Blessings

      Rend


  • motel silver member
    August 5
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    a very soft, beautiful open feel to this write.
    thanks.

  • As always, just beautiful. I envy and admire you.

    It's been years since I have felt these things. Where do I find a love like this?

    Good sex would suffice.

    I think I used to know but I can't remember what I used to know back when I knew what I could remember - well, these days.

    Sounds yummy.

    LOL



    Debbie


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 4
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      Now Debbie,

      you had me rolling on the ground with this one
      Me too Sis, i can so agree,
      Love you, good to see you on

      Blesssings

      Rend


  • solitaire
    August 4

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    elegant

    Very sensuous write yet restrained and written with a tender touch. Lovely imagery and strikingly effective diction and flow. A Delightful poem that touches the heart and imagination.

    solitaire


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 4
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      Thank you so much for stopping.
      I will gladly return the favor as i am grateful for your
      support and clappies,

      Blessings always

      Rend


  • Xianaria gold member
    August 4

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    Beautifully done, Rend! I absolutely adore the imagery and emotion within this piece, very moving. Perhaps it's because I can relate nowdays that something as intimate as this touches me? Probably ~ but that does not take away from your trademark excellence in soft-sensual love poetry. Always a pleasure to read!

    My best to you, thank you for sharing!

    Blessings,

    ~ Tim


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 4
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      thank you so much Tim,
      for stopping by, coming from your expertease in sensuals
      your comments mean alot.

      Blessings always

      Rend


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 4

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    Beautifully sensual and romantic hun!!! This is love, penned with class and takes the reader on it's journey and fulfillment! 6th stanza is my fave.

    Just gorgeous!! You should enter my sensual contest


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 4
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      I just got back from rehersal , earlier i didnt have time to comment back,
      wow I am honored to be invited in your contest, and most importanly Thank you
      so much for stopping by and leaving a comment and clappies,
      you were missed dearly Angel,

      Blessings & love always

      Rend


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 4

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    Good golly grits!!!

    Damn, this was sweetly romantic, softly sensual and very much aawww..inspiring! i loved this beauty my friend..


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 5
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      Swan,

      i just read a write of your and it was Hot!! well done Sir,
      geesh i really need to take a shower, cause it hair washing day

      thank you for all your suport,
      Blessings always
      Rend


  • Supertramp gold member
    August 4
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    real god poem here.. you are an amazing story teller.. flowed perfectly! fantastic!

  • Someone suggested "nice" for this piece of writing. Surely it is beyond "nice" as it is truly beautiful. What more can I say?


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 5
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      thank you for your comment.
      truly nice to meet you
      well return the favor soon my friend
      Blessings always

      Rend


  • trekkergirl
    August 4

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    OH MY GOD!

    What a truly perfect write you have written here! This flow is just perfect. I feel so many different emotions in this... and I truly want to be the two people who you refer to in this write.

    Your imagery paints a picture that anyone would want to experience at least once in their lifetime.

    And your choice of picture is so dead on with this write. Adds to an already perfect write.

    This is sooo sensual.

    It feels sooooo right when I read it.

    Wonderful!

    I love reading writes like this one.

    Thanks for sharing this with us!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 5
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      thank you soooo much for stoping and reading
      your comment and clappies mean a lot.
      and your indepth comment is so gracious
      Blessings always

      Rend


  • DaWildChild
    August 4

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    Nice

    this is a very beautiful write, imagery is perfect,emotion ans sensuality exquistely penned, congrats on being picked for Today's Featured Poem-good luck with the contest...thanks very much for sharing this one.


  • awannabepoet
    August 4
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    For having seen it once before, one must say it is still excellent the second time around and then some.


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    August 4

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    Today's Featured Poem!!!

    You, my dear, are the goddess of sensuality. You always take the reader on a journey of sensuality and ecstasy, in a fashionable manner. I always adore your writing!!!
    I am featuring this for Today's Poem!

    Blessed Be,
    Jeremy


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 5
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      Jeremy,

      Awwww thank you so much for the feature,
      i am very humbled and most delighted Goddess of Sensuality wow
      what a crown, i wish thank you most wholeheartedly
      will return the favor my friend

      Blessings and Love always
      Rend


  • JamesHardy gold member
    August 4

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    Sensuous sea faire, Rend!

    Rend,

    You know I love the allusion of the sea's waves and tempests for the desire and fulfillment of eros. You readily summon passion and it's immediate and visceral.

    I lost the rhythm in stanza 5 with "I know you love me [us, this]" What are you trying to achieve with [us,this]. It makes me think you are irresolute on word choice where you don't have to be. I believe if you left that out and kept "You and me, we are what we've just made, love!", it would flow better and lose none of its passionate realization.

    In stanza 6, tides don't roll. May I suggest you adopt here your later use of "waves".

    In stanza 7, you could maintain the allusion by adding "undersea" before your use of "fires" like undersea volcanoes.

    In stanza 8, I love the image of your lover taking you on "wave after wave" of ecstasy. Can you work in the "breaking" of the as discrete moments of orgasm? Just a thought.

    You deliver passion time and again. That's why you're one of my few favorites, Rend.

    Have a great day,

    Jack


  • Daizee silver member
    August 4

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    This has your name all through out the words, Rend. Everytime I come to you to read your words, my heart is left feeling just a bit softer and full of passion. This is truly your signature style of writing.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    August 4

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    Love shines to the beauty of touch
    and the vibrant sensuality breathes
    A wonderful piece of poetry
    Best wishes in the contest hun
    Julie


  • Garmond gold member
    August 4

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    WOW! What utter sensual, delicate beauty you have painted and expressed here Rend. Every word is soft and warm and the sense of intimacy you have oozing from the lines is remarkable.
    Feelings of such sacred surrender and openess.... oh it is just utterly appealing in every way.
    A masterful and truly inspired write. Who could possibly NOT feel this poem? Good luck.

  • wow lovely write :] Thank you for entering:]


  • Nom de Plume
    August 3

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    beautiful write Rend, oozing sensuality and always with your soft quill... tender moments written tenderly


  • Cannonsfire
    August 3

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    Sensually alluring with that soft pen of yours, you do this so well C


  • toomysterious
    August 3

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    Quite beautiful and very sensual. Love the way you ended it so unexpected with that single word. Thanks for sharing.


  • awannabepoet
    August 3

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    Rend, you have such a wonderful way of scribing sensual moments where love is the magic and the bodies are simply playing out thier parts.

    I once knew this feeling, I once felt my hands gently flurting on soft velvity skin, sadly those days are distant memories and now the hard plastic keys can only relate that which is trapped in the mind for a rainy day.

    This poem is soft, it is pure velvet for the eyes to adore and you know what else, it is pretty damn awesome!

    You always know how to lay it down Rend, bravissimma !

    I like it, I like it so!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 4
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      wow your comment is so detailed, and very thoughtful.
      thank you for giving my poem some care and thought

      Rend

  • Bob Fox
    August 3

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    Poet

    Love. The mystical journey we take when we seek those emotions. And though we debunk the mythe of love by confusing it with lust there still lies that hope deep within that we can master...true love...Splendid write.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 4
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      Bob,

      Thank you so much for your comment
      and clappies

      Blessings always

      Rend

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