The green coolness of your shiny skin,
the majestic girth being pushed in.
Legs opened for this hard delight,
feel the warm river flowing tonight.
Different sizes to fill a mouth,
readying you for your trip south.
Eyes glazing over whenever you are in sight,
be it store or home, release me from my plight.
Into salads most cucumbers will go,
but you are different and inside of me is where I want you,
inside of me, nice and slow.
Playing sexy love games with you is so sweet,
staying firm under pressure, fueling my inner heat.
Moving hands faster,
thrashing you in and out,
cries and moans giving way to an earth shattering shout.
Glistering and wet, I hold you tight,
body trembling as my mind takes a wild flight.
Preparing my body for more fun,
my night with you has only begun.
Reaching climaxes I have never soar before,
minutes passes, an hour later we are still here,
an hour later into the room comes the one I adore.
Lying you aside on the bed stand,
looking lost, alone, I quickly take you back into hand.
On my hands and knees my body will go,
offering him one place,
while I slide you into my wet and needy hole.
Your coolness brings delight,
filling me tonight.
Your firmness and girth,
lifting my body from this earth.
Tomorrow’s salad,
tonight’s cries.
Tomorrow’s dinner,
pushing between my thighs.
Author notes
WOW this was a tough one. My mind has been completely blank on this round and this was all I could come up with.
A contest entry
- The Erotic Challenge (Round 2) by Master Ktulu.
450 points, ended August 17, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this story line is fantastic!
from cries to a salad two nourishing needs
met! this is a stunning sensual write
love and blessings
Rend
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Excellent entry into this round. Here is the technical breakdown of my opinion:
spelling/grammar/punctuation-18
The only grammatical mistake was the word soar. "Soared to" would have been the proper choice if you wanted to use the verb "to soar". Otherwise a reworking of the sentence is needed. I judge grammatical mistakes a little harshly in a contest because they can throw you out of a good suspended animation.
presentation/creativity-18
It was very creative but the rhyme didn't flow perfectly.
how well you handled the challenge-19
The guidelines called for sensual and romantic this round. I felt that your sensual was a tad overwhelmed by the sexual.
"grab me" effect-18
I did reach a point of suspended animation here, although the flow was broken up at times with the rhyme.
overall-19
Thank you for your entry! I look forward to seeing you in future rounds.
Total-92
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WOW...what a HOT start!
spelling/grammar/punctuation-19
Just one suggestion if I may;
"Reaching climaxes I have never soar before,"
here, soar sounds awkward...perhaps using the word reached?
To me in this case "soar" sounds off.
presentation/creativity-20
Excellent presentation....
how well you handled the challenge-20
Ohh the things one can do with a cucumber? LOL
"grab me" effect -20
Hot...
steamy....
Delicious..well done
overall-20
You are off to an excellent start...keep it up.
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Total- 99
**Master Ktulu**
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Shimmer always shines....
in any poem
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awww thank you mcfeeman, you have always been more than kind to me and my poems here, hey good to see you again.
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Let me go get mine out the fridge!!! LOL!! I saw this title and I had to read this! I'm so glad I did
Great job and I loved how you ended this piece. I wish you luck in the contest 
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mmmm
will look at my garden in a whole new way!!!!
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Well Done Shimmer!!!! Cucumbers will always be seen different from here on in.... yummmmmmmm.... lololol
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