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Eyeful For The Misunderstood

Life's uncertain cancerous pest
throws confusion to proud flesh.

 

Yet all... will one day

 crave brotherhoods' charity.

Our conformist attitudes
rejecting the poor in spirit.

Beneath contempt
self righteous go about
Sunday dinners, family outings.


Never lending thought
for the beggar of carnality
 asking only a meal.


Youth in prostitution
needed only to be told of love.



The addict dying
from brokenness,

noses cracked

 while yours is cleanly in the air.

Send your best regards
and toss a dime.


For dare you speak
empathy~
upon their battered souls.

 

Yet all...will one day

crave brotherhoods' charity.

Author notes

When you see a hand that’s held out toward you,
Give it some love, some day it may be you.
Janis Joplin-Down On Me

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  • Max Alexandersson
    October 7
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    Captivating, Lisa Marie.


  • Mr.
    October 3
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    Oooh, very nice, I liked it.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 28

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    This is one hell of a write, I feel these same words you weave daily.. I find myself watching CNN, or local news... and when I see any souls suffering, it hits me hard, and oh how I grieve inside and out... I want to give, and I do... I believe in being a doer, not preaching.. Teaching to me is a form of actions.. not words... I find it hard to deal with my own trials, so, needless to say, seeing those who are far worse, just blows my mind, and I have an overwhelming weight of sorrow come upon me. I thankfully was raised that way... This write is very heart moving, and means a-lot to me.. (This Issue) I fear I harbor some bitterness from those wealthy in some way, because they turn a blind I or two, when they have a gift, and should not look down on others who don't share thei same gift.. For one day, no mater what you believe, I've noticed there's nothing but ashes to ashes, and dust to dust.. So, I look at the current burdens, and try and make my family's plight barable, as well as lend a helping hand to those I can. I said all that to also add this.. I appreciate this "GOLDEN POEM" and most of all, your caring heart of beautiful compassion.. THanks for sharing you..

    Love,

    Timothy.


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    September 25

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    Bountiful~Wise~Unique...

    A majestic social philosophic spiritual poem. "Eyeful For The Misunderstood" flows on a brook of humanity to the lake of compassion, making waves of sublimity and foam of wisdom.

    Much gratitude to the author of "Eyeful For The Misunderstood" for adding value to Poetry and for enriching the American Fine Letters.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • sgking123
    September 11

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    wow

    beautiful poem..........you draw those societal contrasts so well...loved this one dear......hell you are so talented dear


  • toomysterious
    September 8

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    Beautiful words, sentiments all too true. We'll all need charity in due time. Janis one of my favorites, too. This definitely deserved the Gold trophy it received.

  • silverfish
    September 4

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    mmm. makes me thoughtful. i think i've seen in myself and others loss of connection with others, willing to offer a handout for pity and not to lend a hand as an equal shareholder in society. at least, that's what the lines, 'send your best regards/and toss a dime./for dare to speak empathy...' mean to me. i appreciate your writing on things social as well as sensual. also, like your girl in the water pic (but, then, we fish like things wet). take care. -silverfish


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 3

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    Wow. This is absolutely amazing. You did a stunning job on this. And you...my dear...have a beautiful soul and heart.
    Congratulations on your gold trophy!!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Roland Welles gold member
    August 27

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    Visited this again and the sheer brilliance of it all-- of you-- never ceases to amaze and move me... Ironic heart revealing hypocrtical realities of human nature... A perfect poem....


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 27
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      RW

      A revisted poem is a great compliment! I am honored when you read my work.
      Perfection? lol well i never am good at perfection i just write what i feel, so i am also humbled as to your kind words.
      Thank you..
      Hugs
      &
      Love,
      ~Lisa~


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    August 24

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    First of all i want to congratulate you on your Gold.
    it earned every line of it! second i have such a heart
    for the homeless, there are always reasons why they
    are in these situations and its not for me to question
    but be there at my appointed time, I am more blessed
    when i am able to help,
    being left out in the elements and with no shelter that
    gets me every time, especially during the winter,
    thank you for writing such a strong & most heart breaking
    piece, because there are not very many people that will
    help the needy, Bless you so much for that!
    Love and Blessings
    Rend

  • Eusebius
    August 21

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    Ah, yes, the gold rule which most of have sadly forgotten.. And you well deserve the gold trophy of this golen poem!!!


  • AndreaChanel
    August 21

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    "The addict dying
    from brokenness,
    noses cracked
    while yours is cleanly in the air."

    this write definitely speaks the truth...a powerful representation for the misunderstood! loved the flow of rhythm throughout....job well done!


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    August 21

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    So worthy of the Gold trophy! And oh I my soul cries out with you! The nose in the air will someday be the one begging for bread. I truly believe that to be true! I hope that they will find more kindness than that what they have shown, the only way to learn I suppose? Well My applause to you and I'm sure with the age comes wisdom. So therefore I will be back to read more of your works soon. [adding you as a favorite after this poem] Hope you don't mind.

    Take care!

    Becks


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 21
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      Becks

      First i like your name!
      Thank you very much for commenting such a great comment.
      Yes it's the reap what you sow but even at that i hope they do not have to reap because of misunderstanding. I am in hopes that write like this help in a small way to better peoples attitudes on situations.
      This was hard to write in a way because i have been on both sides of this write.
      Let hope it brings some kindness to some hearts.
      Again thank you,
      I added you too..
      Hugs
      ~Lisa~


  • SinfullyYoursLove
    August 21

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    i didn't quite understand it because the level ws so high for me!!but it's nice and sensitive,and really good!


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 21
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      Laila

      We, including me have read things i didn't understand actually many i had to even ask lol..my mentor hates that..lol.
      Simply put we should not look down on others less fortunate than ourselves.
      Even in we do not understand why they do what they do. Or how they got in such a mess. The poor...The homeless...even the drug addicts there are usually reasons behind their sad faces.

      Thank you for reading this and i love the word sensitive..that made me smile.
      Hugs
      ~Lisa~


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    August 21

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    well done! well done!

    BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!
    powerful poem...that reminds us all...
    of the tender beauty of empathy, compassion and mercy.

    and I think you nailed it ...head on!
    Way to write!

    You wrote this very honorably!
    ears/Seattle

    We all need a gentle poke and jab
    for there are way too many
    that live in the lands of silent grief.


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 21
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      Ears

      From you this is a great honor. Thank you so much for reading me.
      You, i concider one of the greats around here.
      Bravo from you, makes me feel like i have served this for something other than applause.
      Again thank you, i added you also.
      Hugs
      ~Lisa~


  • Roland Welles gold member
    August 20
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    If everyone had as big and beautiful heart as yours, this would have never need be written...


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 20
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      Hey RW

      That was very kind of you to say, what a great comment, you have humbled me greatly.
      I like you, your the coolest~

      ~Lisa~


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 20

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    well done. a wonderful reminder of all we too often neglect and neglect to see.


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 20
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      Rick

      Thanks for commenting and your comment rings so true, I am a recovering addict clean for 9 yrs now. I could understand the song and used my own past to write this. There are so many hurting people alot are teens out there that have nowhere to go or no one to listen.
      Again thanks,

      ~Lisa~


  • Miss Macabre silver member
    August 20

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    Amazing! This is a poem with such strong emotion and consideration for the trampled.

    [The addict dying
    from brokenness,
    noses cracked
    while yours is cleanly in the air.]

    I love that stanza. It's something I can relate to, and this poem makes me swell with...I don't know, I can't say pride, I can't put a word to it, but something inside is boiling and it's a good thing. Wonderful write.


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 20
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      J.u.n.k.i.e

      Sweetie i can relate as well to my own write. From my own experiances in life.
      You should feel good about yourself and love yourself. Never let anyone judge and accept the ones that do anyway.
      Glad this spoke to you,
      thanks for reading me.
      Hugs
      ~Lisa~


  • Jfd
    August 20

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    I love where you took this prompt, as a "bleeding heart" social worker, I could really relate to this, there is a great message you relayed to readers but you still kept it poetic, nice job, one small typo i noticed
    "noses cracked
    while your is cleanly in the air."

    maybe "yours"?

    thanks for taking the time to enter


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 20
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      Jfd

      Thank you for honoring this write. I am a softie. I took the prompt serious.
      It's in my heart...
      Best wishes,
      ~Lisa~

    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 20
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      Thanks for showing me the typo all fixed Jfd.


  • Xianaria gold member
    August 19

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    Lisa ~
    This is really, really good! I love your heart in this one, as I know you have a heart for the hurting and lost. Wonderfully done! Best wishes in the contest!


    Tim


    • Soft-Rain gold member
      August 20
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      Tim

      Thank you,
      yes you have seen my struggle for huring people and my fight for the underdogs.
      When you have been there you feel what i wrote, i have been there.
      Thanks for reading,
      ~Lisa~


  • Jfd
    August 18
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    Please complete your poem soon, I would like to judge the contest, if you do not wish to complete it, then please remove your entry

  • Jfd
    August 3
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    Down On Me - Janis Joplin

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