Don't love me before,
or even after,
when now will suffice.
The future's a boor,
or full of laughter,
when now is so nice.
It's a hell of a past,
which sure didn't last,
though now is still here.
A little time for a dream,
an egotistical scheme,
though now still is clear.
Who could use any more,
or higher rafters,
when now is so nice.
Don't love me before,
or even after,
when now will suffice.
Author notes
My first poem written in a while. Not sure of the quality of it, but I like it.
Changed the title of this, to "Now will suffice," from the oringinal "Love me now."
A commentor suggested it, and I felt inclined to agree. Thanks for the mental nudge!
Please tell me what you think
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Brilliant
Now is as good a time as any dawlin. I have missed you terribly and now you are nowhere to be found. Now would be a good time for you to return so that I can love you... how would that be my friend?
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Hello oh Cosmic One! How very nice to hear from you now. Goodness, where does the time go. Now that I think about it, I've missed you as well. How is this life unfolding for you and yours, Rose? Hope all is well!
peace
doug
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Wow! Loved this! Is especially like the first/last paragraph! So many people (myself too it seems) live for tomorrow and yesterday. I think a title of "now will suffice" would have a nice ring to it, but just my opinion.
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findingurself, thank you for reading and commenting. Glad to hear you enjoyed this and I like your title choice. I think I'll change it. Thanks again...
peace
doug
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Thanks a lot for entering this poem in my contest "time" and wish you all the best in my contest.Present is the time to live up with and such thought is very inspiring too.
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Thanks for coming by.
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Young or old, I cannot imagine a place better to Love than right here; right now.
Good to read you again.
Nice work, Doug.
Marianne
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Thanks, Marianne. Hope all is well in your world!
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So nice...
Hey bro, good to see your penwork here again. I believe this is the first time I've seen you do somethng that rhymes and I find it very pleasing. I like rhyme scheme and how you let it vary a little as it must have organically felt like doing. In the second stanza, I may have used "yet now is so nice" instead of "when...". Of course the subject is sublime and to it I can only add that Love IS Now and You Are Love/Loved...
Write on, brother, write on...
Rahad
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Thanks, Rahad. I seem to have not been able to finish a poem in the past few months, though lots of ideas still run rampant thru my brain. Glad to hear you enjoyed this, and I did use to rhyme more often than not in the things I wrote.
I gave a lot of thought to the 'yet/when' point and for some reason, went with how it originally came into my head. lol, which doesn't make it the best way, but saved me from having to choose.
Thanks again...
peace
doug
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add to the finalist list
a mature look at love. why look back at past and postpone loving, when this very moment you can be loving.
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True indeed, mamta. Thank you for the comments and for reading.
peace
doug
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