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HIdden

In the midst of glass and lace
hidden beneath
a pretty face.
sunk under the light
the tunnel of darkness fell
the licking flames of hell
push me up to find the sun.

And so I hide under glass
perfect smile refined class.
Conformity's but a pain in the ass.
Apologize for being crass
and so I dream of sapphires.

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hope it is worthy...
XXVIII )Diamond Garden by *laverinne
kudos to the artist....

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  • PastelMoons gold member
    August 4

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    Great metaphors!!!
    Imagery is awesome and
    my fav lines --' the midst of glass and lace
    hidden beneath a pretty face.'
    I also love your ending and all
    the lines in between
    I have missed reading you!
    Thanks for sharing and best
    wishes in the contest!

    ~Pastel


  • Legend silver member
    August 3

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    I love this poem How many hid the real person beneath outer clothing. Longing to show the what is real but held back by others perception
    Excellent
    Good luck in the contest


    • vici377
      August 3
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      thank you so much my dear friend...
      blessings..
      r