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sweet autumn (bronze trophy)

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summer days, so hot, so sticky

hover ever closer, their touch like fire

the heat seems to scorch my brain

and the birds look for solace in the trees

 

with temperatures rising

degree by degree, I stay secluded

in my airconditioned home

and long for the days of autumn

 

when once again a gentle breeze

is felt across the land

its coolness welcomed with open arms

sweet autumn, please come soon

 

the beauty of your amber leaves

the last sweet fragrance of your flowers

makes my heart sing with joy

summer’s heat forgotten

 

as leaves fall and school bells ring

the trees rehearse their play

of dancing naked in the rain

for all the world to see

 

come close sweet autumn

hold me within your arms

before winter’s unforgiving cold

hides autumn’s peaceful glow

 

dee garner

august 2, 2009

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  • laura0757 gold member
    October 1

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    Iwas driving this morning to work, i take all country roads, and its early in the morning and I watch the sunrise and what I love about this drive, is how beautiful it is in the fall, the bright yellows, the feiry red burning bushes around here, the red sumaks, the way the leaves start falling like glitter at times with the way the sun shines through the trees, this poem, is this, and the heat, but I like you dont like the cold few do, I imagine, but when I read the air conditioned home, I thought our summer was cold this year, so I am hoping our fall will be extra warm, if not I will keep reading poems to keep me warm,,,,,


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    September 26

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    I love autumn. I do miss being where you can actually enjoy it and it's colors. Florida is not too good in that aspect. Your poem really brought it back to me though and set me in the mood. Blessed Autumn


  • ZachP silver member
    September 24

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    My dear Dee:
    Out here in California, our autumn is just starting to heat up 90s this week; and I can only hope it's a little better next week

    However, I'm in the air conditioning, so I don't have to complain about the heat for the time being.

    This poem is beautiful, a true testament to the power of imagery that buffets all of the senses. This is magnificent, and it's not hard to see why you placed in the contest

    Thank you for sharing with us.

    All my best,
    Zach Estel.


  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    September 14

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    An absolute delight on my senses! Wow Dee! You have really captured my attention with this poem. I loved it!


    • catz Moderators member
      September 14

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      Thank you. Autumn really is my favorite season and such a nice reprieve from our hot summers here in Phoenix. Our 110-115F temperatures which we've had all summer is just too danged HOT !!
      Dee


      • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
        September 14
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        I must agree....something about the fall season that is just so beautiful. We have been lucky in Ne. Our summers over the past couple of years has been very mild. It was really hot in 2006.


  • individuality gold member
    September 5

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    a good piece penned, ah you had a warm - hot summer then, lol not so here, it has been more like an autumn before autumn here other than one week a few weeks back, merry old england, where the rain loves rain. colourful atumn is strolling ever closer into the longing sighs.


    • catz Moderators member
      September 5
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      Yes, our summer has been extremely hot, Ian. Today is the first almost cool day since summer began... well, it was actually still springtime but someone forgot to tell the weatherman.
      Today we actually turned off the AC and opened up the windows ALL DAY!! It was about 80-82 degrees and a nice breeze blowing most of the time. It was like Heaven to be able to sit on the patio for as long as we wanted to for a change.

      Thank you for the read and comment, always appreciated coming from you

      luv and
      Dee


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    September 5

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    Dee,
    this is beautiful, i love Autum. and the way the leaves change,
    truly a wonderful piece

    with love and blessings

    Rend


  • Tarimornie
    September 3

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    beautiful

    this is a wonderful poem. it makes me nostalgic and i can find myself getting lost in the photograph with your words. i wish i had some place as beautiful to walk through and think about where my life has taken me and where it will be going. thank you for the beautiful reminder of simple pleasures.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    August 28

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    excellent

    Congrats on the BRONZE TROPHY
    Beautiful poem for a beautiful season.............
    I love all the color but not the nip in the air
    Congrats again
    Your sis always
    Susan~~~~


  • Maatkara gold member
    August 27

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    This is such a lovely tribute to my favorite season! Your last two stanzas are especially gorgeous. I always look forward to Autumn as the most stable for moderate temperatures, as well as the beauty of its changing colors. Spring is pretty but the weather changes so much.

    Very well done, Dee


  • Wesley Storer
    August 23

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    Old leaf covered bridge

    Amid the white birch trees. How beautifully your words do justice to this fabulous picture and the peace it instills in the reader. The 4th and 5th stanzas are poignantly beautiful. The world today is so full of information overload that people don't seem to have the time to really stop and think about fine poetry such as this. May Autumn find you soon, and she will, because she knows you are one of her special admirers. I am too. Stay cool!


    • catz Moderators member
      August 23
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      Thank you, Wesley, I do for sure await with anticipation those cool days of Autumn. When I lived in Washington I always looked forward to the changing of the leaves, their majestic colors. Here in Phoenix we don't see much of that, though.
      Stay safe
      Dee


  • Maureen silver member
    August 20
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    Excellent!

    Very nicely done, Dee! I really enjoyed it!



    ♥ Maureen


  • poetryality silver member
    August 13

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    Beautiful! Autumn is my most favorite time of the year. The colors take my breath away, and I have woods as my backyard. The folage become brilliant and I am truly one who love sweater/jacket weather. This is lovely Dee.

    "as leaves fall and school bells ring
    the trees rehearse their play
    of dancing naked in the rain
    for all the world to see"

    What a grand contralto you've written with this stanza. I wish you well in the challenge dear sister. Breathtaking!


    Always ♥

    Renee


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    August 10

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    "...the trees rehearse their play
    of dancing naked in the rain..."

    You captured in a clever sentence
    Fall's stripping of leaves,
    persistent rain...



    The entire piece welcomes
    Autumn so perfectly, catz!

    M-C



  • Wickedruby1 gold member
    August 9

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    Lovely

    This is a very lovely poem, ll their seasons have their special beauty but Autumn has some of all mixed together. These words make me want to look out and see red maples loosing their leaves.


  • morningstar1948 gold member
    August 8

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    HEY SIS I LOVE THIS ONE

    INDIAN SUMMER ALWAYS MAKE ME FEEL LIKE IAM WASH CLEAN OF THE SUMMER HEAT AND THEN I FEEL LIKE DOING THE THINGS I LOVE TO DO BEFORE THAT ACCIDENT MANY YRS AGO. SOON YOU AND I WILL SEE EACH OTHER. THE MONTHS IS GOING FASTER.
    LOVE YOU SIS
    MORNINGSTAR

  • Just4u
    August 7

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    It doesn't look like we will get Summer around here. There have only been
    a few days in the 80s and a couple in 90s. Other than that it took forever
    to hit the 70s and it was only 68 today. Last Winter was so long and bitterly
    cold I hope we aren't in for a repeat.
    I love Autumn and the changing colors but it always reminds me that
    Winter is right around the corner.

    Hugs...Eddy


  • pixiestix gold member
    August 7

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    Truly a beautifully written piece filled with vibrant autumn imagry.

    I'm looking forward to the change of season myself although in my area we haven't had anything close to a "normal" summer...very wet and relatively mild.

    A very enjoyable read, Dee.


  • leo2
    August 7

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    Since early May I've been praying for exactly the same thing. Maybe there IS something to this global warming phenomonon after all. Your words have landed on hopeful and sweaty ears that wish you well in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    August 7
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    Now Ms Dee,
    your use of nature is this piece is so beautifully
    painted like a Monet, lovely vivid colors with
    all your metaphors

    Blessings

    Rend


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    August 5

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    Lovely and with such discriptive phrases you do not even care that it does not rhyme...It reads like it does...

    It is hot plus extremly high humidity here but like you we have wonderufl airconditioning...long as we don't get a hurricaine and lose power...but at l east then the wind is blowing and it is barable...I would love to enter this contest but with being gone in a couple of days and not having a computer for a month it would be unfair...next time...

    I was surrprised there was no sonnets allowed...just when I am getting good and woul dhave had the perfect one for this contest from my last class...and a well written one too...Oh well, next time...

    So good luck in the contest...I see a trophy lurking in the shadows.. Hugs Darlene


  • Ellis gold member
    August 5
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    Lovely

    Makes me stand and applaud for Autumn!


  • hugh wyles silver member
    August 4

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    Dear Dee.

    Usually, Autumn brings some of our best and most beautiful days in Christchurch/NZ. No longer too hot as in Summer with its Nor'westers nor the chilling Southerlies of Winter, but warm breezes from the East which gently stir the golden-amber carpets of leaves on lawns and roadsides throughout this "Garden City" as the last flowers of Summer shed their petals.
    This year we almost missed Autumn as Winter arrived early to give us the coldest May/June weather on record. We even had snowfalls in our garden in June!
    Now, when we are supposed to be in mid-Winter, after a bleak, miserable July, we are enjoying fine, sunny days with clear blue skies and, if it were not for the bare trees, one would think it was now Autumn here.
    Yet further South and in the North Island, heavy snowfalls and mountain avalanches remind us that it is, indeed, Winter in New Zealabd.
    Thankyou for your beautiful poem which is so well worded that I had almost reached the end of it before I realised it was not rhyming! LOL.
    I love the picture too. A lovely Autumn woodland scene.
    Good luck in the voting and thankyou for helping Blushfulmoon to set up this contest No.#47.
    Love and hugs, XXX Hugh (R.)


  • Vernal Bloom
    August 4

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    Wow, such a spelindid piece of art! You, dear lady, are the master in words. Thank you kindly for sharing this beautiful picture you have painted with words and good luck in the contest

    ~Massy~


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    August 3
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    excellent

    Oh Dee
    I love this one................
    All too true
    I loved these lines:the trees rehearse their play

    of dancing naked in the rain

    for all the world to see
    But love the entire poem
    Good luck in the contest sis
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 3

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    Autumn has always been my most favorite season, and I was born the day after it began. It seems we are both domesticated critters, Dee. I certainly must have my air conditioning, as well as my source of heat once Winter finds its way back into my bones. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. This is a lovely and true piece about the best season of all. Bring on the sweaters, the afghans, the stews, the hot chocolate, I say.



  • UnbreakableSoul gold member
    August 3

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    Very Nice

    Dee, this is a wonderful poem about your antipation of autumn.
    I really like it and it sounds so cozy and warmhearted.
    Blessings and Love!


  • Sherry gold member
    August 3

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    Oh I bet you and my guy live in the heat of very little rain bless your heart Dee yes stay in with the air conditioning. I would not like it that hot but I bet your autumns are wonderful there and springs. I love to visit in the cooler months. What keeps you there?

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