She moves, delicately.
I am envious of the way
she loves.
I am "stronger" than she,
So I bare the burden.
Perhaps "foolish" is a
more suiting word.
I am foolish,
because she speaks
of love.
And I write a
fucking poem about it.
Author notes
I never say "I love you", I write it..I don't say it. She always said I should say it, I wish I did. I wish she could hear it.
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some of us cant say it... But people dont know why. U look like a beautiful woman... even though your beautiful you can still be toyed with. ... The reason why some cant say it is because ppl are afraid of getting bullet holes back into their heart after there heart was force to heal
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this was a very unique piece to read, especially the style. the words were pretty strong and the message and story behind this is sad and sweet at the same time. thanks for entering
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Yeah, i know what you mean. some go out and speak their minds, but as for others, well, we just sit back and write. its as if we think it will help, and it does mentally, but really, if they don't read our writing, they will never know how we feel. A truly nice piece! i like your style
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Well done
I like this. Well done. It's very honest.
Just a few little spellings to help you correct it: "bare" should be spelt "bear" in this case, and I think you mean "suitable" in the fourth verse.
This is a very enjoyable poem... Keep writing.
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lmao... "spelt" is an ancient variety of wheat. I think you meant "spelled".
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Ah I know how this is. You did an amazing job writing this piece. Keep up your amazing work, and I wish you the best of luck.
TwiztidMaggot -
No one has written a poem about me.
today..
That's some good looking women, in that pic.
Joe
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very good! well written and i agree with the last critique, what a private thought for yout o share. Sometimes its hard to say i love you face to face, and alot of the time it is a hell of alot easier to write down how you feel.. I am the same, can say my good feeling outloud, but if i am upset etc i can not tell anyone i have to write it. Well done on this, i really enjoyed it~!
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outstanding poem, so well written, inviting the reader into a private thought. excellent work.
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and that just shows what an impact she has... in a wonderful way we all need that someone to help us look at things how we wouldn't normally sometimes. i am certain that you do that for her, too. i had to laugh at that last line because it is just like i could picture you rolling your eyes. lol
this really was great.
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Wow, that was awesome. So powerfully written, I thought it was going to be sweet and short but wow, that was a slap in the face. Great write
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She can hear it..SAY IT...shout it...I for once, agree with J Macabre...its a hard thing to express and indeed another to feel rejected. IN this case though Shout it out, love her.Its okay to say I love you and I know you can do it.
Its always best to say and express, we never know what the next minute holds..
so addy, as I said repeated, I love you dear one, you have been a wonderful friend.
Stay strong..
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As per the usual ... I fricking love it! lol! Once again you've shown your knack for taking a thought and putting it into beautiful flowing words that grab the reader from the get-go and make them feel exactly as you do. Wonderful job!
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It can be scary to say those words sometimes because once you say them...you've declared your love for the person...and its scary to have that rejected or turned away...or even taken advantage of. You CAN say it though...just summon that strength in you deep down...and when you do say it...say it with every fiber of your being.
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