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Chasing nothing but a dream

So many emotions at once, I'm not sure how to feel
So many things in my heart proved false, I can't tell whats real

So sure of her eyes that I've seen myself in
But it wasn't me I saw, I now know it was him

How is it that one can fall so hard and so fast
While the other feels nothing, at least nothing that lasts

How can I be the best friend that she needs, if I'm so dead inside
How can I ever trust what I feel, I was so sure, But I know that my heart lied

I'm so lost in confusion, who am I, how are these two loves to part
I'm not strong enough to let go of her, but I guess I never really had her heart

I can't lose her face, her hands, her lips, but they were never really mine
I can't lose her friendship, her guidance, her support, without them I'm lost to time

How do you get over losing the greatest love, something you never really had
What are you suppose to do, when the best thing in your life makes you hurt so bad

 

How do I stay here, while so much love is felt solely on my own

I have to find a way, I can't lose the greatest friend I've ever known

Written By Beau Bennett
08-02-09

Author notes

Hmmmm I dont think this is a very good poem but theres just too much goin on in chest to figure out how to word it or put it idk any suggestions will help if you can help me form this somehow or orginise it better thanks,......I really am a better writter than this but im just so drained I feel so empty even my talent has left me....sigh

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  • Heroesrox
    August 9

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    This is quite the emotional torrent of a piece. I liked it, but it is not really what I am looking for in this contest. Thanks so much for taking the time to enter! Best wishes to you, fellow poet.


  • Snowing Kisses silver member
    August 3

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    well.... I really really like the heartfelt ambience, tugs heartstrings, and..well ...right now, i feel you too... big time, cos i have the same emotions, and you expressed them well enough for the both of us
    you did good hear, really good, and if u wanna share my cyber tissues im sure i have a couple dry somewhere
    this is awesomely emotive
    bravo
    T


    • Acidbath
      August 3
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      why spank you. spank you very much =).......oh by the way the person this is about is in this picture with me just so ya know