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To My Head With Your Cleaver

Sugar coated secrets striking down like lightning,
turning into evils dust and ashes.

Liar, deceiver,
to my head with your cleaver.

The wind becomes friends with the night,
swirls and twirls around like an enemy.

Liar, deceiver,
to my head with your cleaver.

The faultiness of your wiring, shortening out reality,
But beware for this is where the devil dwells.

Liar, deceiver,
to my head with your cleaver.

Will the sunset tomorrow,
will the fear roar again,
will the chains tighten further,
will the screams be silent again.

Liar, deceiver,
to my head with your cleaver.

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  • John BoSox
    August 28

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    Beautifull peom..I mean it..compelling.. I can feel your emotions..so good.I love your free style verse..keep writing..you have talent..so good.I loved this

    John


  • awannabepoet
    August 27

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    Oh my what a nice refrain (nice for a dark write of course) I really like it and could hear this being belted out for a dark song.

    Way to go Vickie another fine poem / lyric.

    I really liked this and thanks so much for always sharing your wonderful talent.


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    August 23

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    Profound and wise...



    I like the poem for its contents and poemization.

    It seems that from lines Thirteen to sixteen, the poem needs to revised to improve the thoughts there, and make the clearly.

    "To My Head With Your Cleaver" sings beautifully, and will show its full light after the revision of the above stated lines. Please revise them.

    In admiartion,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Perfect Asymmetry
    August 4

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    I love the first stanza so very much! The whole poem is just brilliant. I love how you can put your feelings in such a beautiful words.
    May your muse never abandon you!
    Nela

  • sleepinglion
    August 3

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    There's a ''Bad moon rising'' here Vickie. have you put this to music?
    Hope it's not how you realy feel
    love david


  • truemaliboo
    August 3
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    i love the rym

    i love this this is my favorite


  • Puppydog gold member
    August 2

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    OH MY!!! SO DISHEARTENING!!!!

    I sincerely hope these feelings are not real Everyone deserves to have good things happen, not bad. 's


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 2

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    It seems you are in a cage of some incident and despite all your efforts you are unable to open the door of this cage...very heartfelt truth you stated here...

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