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CRUSH[ed]

Stepped on like a soda can
But my aluminum heart
you did not recycle.

You trashed it instead
allowing it to sit
forever in a landfill
For the birds to pick at
The dogs to chew up
The critters to live inside.

Aluminum does not decompose
So I will experience this painful demise
until the end of time.

A contest entry

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  • annother gold member
    August 2

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    Very good write. I do like the aluminum can metaphor a lot. Thank you for the entry, best of luck in the contest.