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The Pear

On the sill it sits
Ripening
Fragrance
Within a bruised skin
Softening
But still
It faces the sun

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Written March 28th, 2004

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  • janesays
    April 3, 2004
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    An ode to a pear, bruised but not beaten.....how can I not love this.

    -jane


  • dp robertson
    April 1, 2004
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    Personally I love eating pears or is that a euphemism too?


  • poetryality silver member
    April 1, 2004
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    I guess it depends in which window the pear sits as to whether or not it faces the sun. This is a still life poem, and well written.

    Much Love,
    Renee


  • cubert
    April 1, 2004
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    Jane, this was wonderful. Something about the personification of those simple everyday things we generally overlook has always really appealed to me. Time just stops for a moment, and I sit back and consider. I love that feeling. Thank you for giving it to me...again.


  • pastiche
    March 29, 2004
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    Beautiful in itself, beautiful also for what it shows of the poet's mind. Aren't poems the softest mirrors?
    Keep facing the sun,
    Best,
    Peter


  • March 29, 2004
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    well now tht i read it again, the lack of face on a pear allows it to face the sun always, paradoxically enough. The image is attractive, and the poem simple and pure and i think there is something very zen and forthright about your ode to fruit here that is appealing and meritous.

    I could see this little poem in a cookbook, next to a recipe for poached pears. Or on a calander.


    Edited on Mar 29, 10:02 because ''.


  • hugh wyles silver member
    March 28, 2004
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    I have to agree, for once, with edpeterson666 (in fact I might even try his cheese dip some time if he'll let me). My infallible dictionary defines the verb 'face' as 'to turn the face towards, to confront boldly, to cause to turn in any direction.' Unless the said pear is highly motivated or the sill is actually revolving in concurrence with the Earth's orbit around the sun it could hardly 'face' the sun. And as edP. so rightly asks, how does one differentiate between the face and the ass of a pear? Jane, I think you may have got this
    "ass about face" as we say down under.
    But don't be discouraged by us purists, just rewrite it. Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.


  • March 28, 2004
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    how can i tell if one of my pears is facing the sun, or if it is facing the other way? does it have an ass? or a snorkel?


  • March 28, 2004
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    i did not know that pears had faces. but i do like them.

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