Suits and ties are their holy attire
But feet are stuck in judgment’s mire.
Missed the joy of freedom’s rest,
Always fear they’ll fail the test.
In heaven’s love they do not trust,
By words and deeds they must be just.
Faith and grace painted on their wall
But fear and doubt—
Have stained their soul.
Author notes
Guilt is the gift that keeps on giving. - unknown
In a list
A contest entry
- Prewrites! NEW writes! I Want It All! by lesbian-in-love.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wise Old Sayings by Tqop.
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Comments
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Not bad, one of the best I have gotten so far. I liked the flow. Over all it read real nice. good luck in my contest and good job.
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it is true in heaven's love they do not trust
your ending really speaks volumes of truth
God bless you my friend...
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Very inspriational. I like your take on this. It was very deep. Thanks for sharing.
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This was well written.It was enjoyable to read. It flowed really good. The rhyming was well done. Thanks so much for entering and good luck to you in the contest.
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yep, and the madness will never end, we'll just keep patching it up and sending it out like the next, groovy salvation.
Thank you for taking the time to enter, and I wish you all the best.
love,
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Your word rings true, and brings attention to those who would rather look righteous than act righteous. It is all window dressing and most can see through the pompous behavior, past the expensive suits and into soul's windows to find their truest darkness.
Great title!
Excellent work here poet. I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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A beautiful explanation of legalistic or exterior piety.
Very convicting.
This verse is true to the soulful bone. I love the flow, rhymes, and
overall demeanor of this poem.
Only thing I would do differently is format it in 2 single-spaced stanzas
with the last two lines as couplet to summate the content.
Lovely, lovely!
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Thank you very much for the formatting suggestions. That and punctuation are two things I have a lot of difficulty determining.
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This is a Parable
So true... and, ouch! Sometimes, it's also true of me. But thank GOD! His grace has always proven to be bigger than "me," and well able to change the doubts I see.
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