This, is my shaded path, with spots of light.
My smooth, luscious path is dirty, and rough.
What's at the end, of this unknown sight?
How can walking, this long path, be so tough?
I keep walking, down my long path, I feel, pain.
Scarlet blood droops, drips, onto my path.
When I reach the end, I might be, insane.
Seeking, a way to avoid, nature's wrath.
Walking, alone down my path, I'm afraid.
I wish I had , my lover's warm embrace.
Then, I wouldn't be in this, gloomy shade.
Bleeding, to my end, in such a disgrace.
My long path, tailed in, scarlet blood and tears,
though I am at the end, I still have, fears.
Author notes
I played with the pauses a bit I thought it gave it a nice touch.Tell me what you think of it please.
A contest entry
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Comments
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A+ great job
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Awesome yet again. Absolutely loooooooooved it! *Reads again*
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Ok the rhyming was ok, i liked this piece allot though, great take on the prompt and allot of emotion, great write , thanks and good luck in my contest!!!
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This is truly a beautiful sonnet with a wonderful bitter sweet introspective feel. You did a great job when you decided to pen the Volta at the couplet rather than L9 because it keeps the reader hanging on a bit. I can tell that the author feels very comfortable writing sonnets and that is a true gift.
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you so much reading this was nice start to my morning.
Now all I need is a Mountain Dew and it will be perfect.BTW I think I was in two of your AP classes I think one was on Haiku and the other was on Sestinas. Anyways I am so sorry I forgot to do those assignments I feel stupid.lol
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