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To Stand is to Fall

Cowering in warm, dark places
with arms wrapped tightly around knees
I contemplate:

Should I emerge now,
and give the world a try?
Is it lovely out there?
I do hope so.

So carefully, and crawling
I open my eyes and my soul
to whatever may come

and am ripped apart.

Torn and maimed by the hopelessness
that has become an epidemic,

I take my last breath
and wish I had stayed home

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  • Perfect Asymmetry
    October 9

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    Wow, very powerful! World is definitely a cruel place, reigned by confusion and hopelessness. But we must be brave and crawl out of our holes, cause life cannot kill us.
    Bravo!
    Nela


  • xeroabyss II
    September 1

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    Dare to venture into the world, and risk annihilation at its hands.
    Tis why the dead stay buried and aliens act covertly.


  • MyCutsDontBleed
    August 13

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    Awesome!

    This is really good. My favorite part was:
    "Torn and maimed by the hopelessness
    that as become an epidemic"
    With some works the title really brings into the poem and it certainly did for you. My only suggestions for improvemant would be to add some grammar. Otherwise, great write!


  • StillLovingYou
    August 1
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    very nice! i loved it!

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