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Bleeding Masacara

He Hits Me And Knocks Me Down
Each Time I Fall Harder
I Jump And They Sit And Watch
While I Fall To The Ground
He Whispers
Look How Pretty She Is,
When She Falls Down

All Of Them Follow To The ER
He Watches As She Is Taken Away
He Sees The Masacara Running Down My Face
He Whispers
Now There's No Beauty In Bleeding Masacara

They Sit And Watch
Waiting
I Look Up
Say My Last Words With Quivering Lips
He Whispers
Look How Pretty She Is,When She Falls Down
Now There's No Beauty In Bleeding Masacara
Lips Are Quivering Like A Whithering Rose


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  • Jason Lee Pierce
    November 17
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    Deep and depressing

    i may be a man, but the poem speaks to me. its very dark and morbid. but thats what poetry is truly about. i enjoyed this.

  • alldrama
    July 31

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    Dude..... i recognise those lines! some of them are from the song "bleeding mascara" by atreyu.... I dont know if that was the aim or what, but that would need clarifying.


  • SerenitySucks
    July 31
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    Hmm...

    I'm not sure i quite get the ending. Is the poem about abuse and how she can't let go of her love though?