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The Tangled Cadences of the Sea

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As I watched the tangled cadences of the sea,


blackberries dangled like crisp
slumberous wildflower tea-cups.


Apricots amniotic succulence simmering,

as cold, desolate strawberries
cradle her face with mask and nightdress.


Heavy arterial milk rains changed

their lucidity.


As ebony's russet snowy topped husks
of amber satin spiked dandelion's seed
sail swiftly on the wind.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • InBetterClothes gold member
    7 hours ago
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    First of all, your playlist on your author page is pretty awesome.  At once very diverse and very tasteful. I only knew about half of them but definite kudos on that

    The title definitely grabbed me on this one, and you maintained my interest throughout the entirety of the poem.  I know saying that you have great images is rehashing, but it's true. 

     

    "blackberries dangled like crisp
    slumberous wildflower tea-cups    "

     

    absolutely amazing.  Fantastic job on this.

     

    Thanks for adding me as a favorite


    • redbarchettadrive gold member
      6 hours ago
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      Thanks so much! This was written when my muse was in full bloom. I just recently started writing again. I quit for a bout 2 1/2 months! I hate when that happens!


      • InBetterClothes gold member
        6 hours ago
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        Agreed. I haven't been in the full swing of things since last February--I wouldn't have written the poems I have up now if they hadn't been assigned! But now that my poetry class is over and I have a little better feel for how to write hopefully I'll get back in the habit.


  • Not-The-Sun
    October 5

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    beautiful;

    this puts any of my metaphors and imagery in my poems to shame;
    the title is so fitting and touching
    love the background, too. nicely penned : )


  • light to a dreamer gold member
    August 7
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    Nice Work

    Great detail with a wonderful flow. Lots of feeling to see also!


  • Antebellum
    August 3
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    Beautiful write.
    absoultly adore the background.
    thanks for taking thetime to enter,
    goodluck


  • maralisa silver member
    July 31

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    aw a very beautiful poem your imagery is divine throughout thank you for sharingmaralisa


  • Denerica silver member
    July 31

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    Much creative imagery, color, taste and the feel, oceans of it sound tantilizing with well written words here. Blessings.


  • Mango Memories gold member
    July 31
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    ooo... lovely imagery.

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