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Being Lonesome Requires Change

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Tears are changing to a birthday smile,
where sleepy rain always tends to fall.
Sometimes shy, where sleep won't hardly come.


Being lonesome requires change...

A pouring sky has an eye on

conquering a crying world.


I feel she fell through a hole from Heaven's floor.

Now, I have been here forever,
I can't expect this town to change.


Are tears the only thing falling today?

 

Must I sit here and watch the clouds roll away
in this disarray along with these windblown years?

I refuse to miss something I have never touched...

 

 

A contest entry

This poem was born using Holes in the Floor of Heaven and Everything Changes

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  • toomysterious
    September 7

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    Very interesting, esp. how well you did with two such disparate songs. I'm still exploring this concept in my head, but promise to jump in soon with something. Been a long day though and I must call it a night.


  • Antebellum
    August 3

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    I refuse to miss something I have never touched...


    I love this line.
    theres some amazing imagery in this as well.
    thanks for entering.


  • maralisa silver member
    August 1
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    aw a wonderful write thank you for sharingmaralisa


  • annother gold member
    July 31

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    This is a great write. I love the last line... hmmm it may inspire me to write something (I'll keep you posted lol). There is great imagery in this as well. Great job.


  • Antipodi
    July 31
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    Wow wow this has some real poetic power in its emotional presence ...an excellent write dear poet


  • Cup-a-Joe
    July 31

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    Two very good songs Red. You did an excellent job in merging the two into one. Nashville here you come.
    Joe

  • Great job RBD. You know this makes me want to write another song mesh poem. The one I did was fun it is just that sometimes I don't think mine makes much sense. This made perfect sense. I been thinkin bout writing one again being that I'm still part of the Classic Rock Poetry group and reading this I think has given me inspiration!! Thanks and great job!!!

    • Thanks Still! I asked my boy to give me two songs. He gave me Holes in the Floor of Heaven (*a country song) and Everything Changes by Staind. Thanks again for reading!

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