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No Transmission

Alakazam, hocus pocus
I wilted like a dozen roses,
without water for weeks
I lost the redness in my cheeks
Maybe I just need to focus
Amidst this swarm of locusts,
and fucking cockroaches

I lie awake in my bed
wondering what happened
to the face in the mirror
I've become what I've always feared
A lonely recluse with no one to hold dear
I just want to be melancholy free,
and be one with birds and bees
But I can't get past this tribulation
I guess I'll stick to masturbation

I lost my own self-recognition,
and I'm getting awfully dizzy
from this mental emission
and if you could check,
there would be no transmission




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  • The Molt
    August 5

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    There is something about this poem upsettingly fabulous. It basically underlines everything I have ever felt about love and sex. They just wait for us not to be good enough for them, and when we become so, they smash it in our faces. Now, I am young, so I could consider this as a warning. (And I shall) But, I'm going to carry these thoughts is my head untill i die. And in the meantime, I'm going to masturbate.


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    August 5

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    I LIKE THIS,
    I guess I am glad that being alone troubles me not. I have kids and grands so I get more social interaction than I wish for at times.
    You have a wonderful way of showing the developement and realization of the issue. The face in the mirror always seems to be the one which we fear the most. "To the beautiful and the wise, the mirror often lies" N. Peart-"Warpaint"
    Peace


    • TrulyLoothy
      August 7
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      not that I always feel this way I actually feel beautiful. But this was about someone who does not


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    August 3
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    This was great! very creative & clever word choice, keep writing

    x

  • newlywed
    August 3
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    I like this lot - it made me laugh at the same time as being very clever and using lots of interesting words

  • TrulyLoothy
    August 1
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    thanks so much


  • kyuuketsuki ai
    August 1

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    wow, that is full of really strong thoughts and images...excellent...I love that sort of writing. "I wilted like a dozen roses," is a fantastic line. Very interesting. It is like the speaker is having that moment where one realizes that they are not being the person they had always thought they would be (at least, that's how I interpret it). It is sort of like being brutally honest with oneself-- fascinating. VERY interesting rhymes. Rhyming, internal or otherwise, can often serve to put me off of a poem (at least recently), but I really liked this. The words you use are not cliche, nor are they usual textbook rhymes. Very nice. I liked it.

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